Kara's Reviews > Monument 14
Monument 14 (Monument 14 #1)
by Emmy Laybourne (Goodreads Author)
by Emmy Laybourne (Goodreads Author)
Kara's review
bookshelves: debut-authors-2012, 2012-reading-challenge, arc, animals, colorado, for-review, net-galley, post-apocalyptic, young-adult
May 10, 12
bookshelves: debut-authors-2012, 2012-reading-challenge, arc, animals, colorado, for-review, net-galley, post-apocalyptic, young-adult
Read from May 01 to 07, 2012
It's been a few days since I finished Monument 14 and yet I still think about it from time to time. It's not a perfect book. To be honest, it's not even close to perfect. I could even say I barely liked it. But the truth is, I really loved the setting. And because of that I cannot stop thinking about it. When I was a kid, one of my favorite books was Richard Peck's Secrets of the Shopping Mall. I doubt if I read the same book today that it would have the same impact it did on me as a kid, but ever since then I have always wanted to read books with a 'store setting'. If it's written in a mall, a grocery store, or a museum, I have to read it. So obviously even though I had issues with this book, the setting still blew me away. And that's also kind of where I was disappointed too. I didn't feel the author utilized the setting to her full advantage. The characters were trapped in a Greenway Superstore (think Wal-Mart) and could not go outside because of what was going on in the world. The author could have totally wrote it from a more claustrophobic angle. But she didn't. And because of that I don't think it had quite the effect on the reader she was looking for.
One of the things that really annoys me as a reader is being constantly treated like a child, or treated like I cannot retain any of the information I read. I found that in a couple of places in Monument 14 the author repeated information that I really felt was unnecessary to keep repeating. Just because it is a YA book doesn't mean teens aren't intelligent. If there is one tip I can give to a new author, it is to assume your reader is smart and knows how to use their brain. Even if they don't. Do not act like as the author you know more than your reader. YOU. DO. NOT. And it pisses me off to NO END when authors are condescending towards their readers. Here's an example of what I am talking about.
Niko half dragged me through the hail, down the "aisle" that was not an aisle but was actually the space above the seats (because, remember, the bus was on its side). What the hell is that? Everyone in America knows the bus tipped over and they had to use the side of the bus as the aisle way. It was enough to know the bus tipped over. But then even before this quote you mentioned it a few times. Then you had to repeat it again here. And that whole "because remember" has me really wanting to punch someone's lights out. That is so friggin condescending. For serious.
The plot? True. What would a book be without some sense of plot? You'll have to look fairly hard for the plot in this book though. Until the last 50 or so pages, there really wasn't much of one at all. And that's kind of a problem. You'll read about the characters sleeping, eating, cooking, and even pooping, but if you are looking for excitement, you might want to skip ahead to page 235ish. Unless you are interested in the process of shampooing lice out of hair. Or how to knock the wall out of a dressing room. By the way, I hope that wasn't a stud wall they knocked down or they are in for some trouble.
One of the issues I had were the fact there were too many characters. Some of them I liked, but for the most part, they all talked the same, all acted the same (especially the little kids) and I had a hard time telling them apart. I think there were like 10 characters. And they were all present from scene to scene and talking. So if you weren't paying close attention, it could get confusing. It wouldn't have been so much of an issue if you could tell them apart through character development, but I really wasn't able to, so something was obviously missing.
Monument 14 did get better towards the end. Once the two adults came into the picture and a plan was made to leave the store, and the mundane every day tasks came to an end, then I started enjoying the book more. The plot picked up and I was finally interested. I still had issues with the flat characterizations, but the story got going, and that was enough for me to bump my rating up from a 2 star to a 3. The last 50 pages really made a difference and now I am wanting to read the next book in the hopes that the story continues to develop in an exciting way.
Before I go, I saw another review that I had to comment on. I rarely ever do this. I don't think I ever have. But because the review (I felt) was so misleading and could put someone off from reading this book that might enjoy it, I have to. You can go ahead and skip this part if you disagree with what I am doing. Another reviewer claimed there was a rape in this book. For the record, there is no rape in this book. There is a situation that almost ends in rape, but it is stopped before it gets that far. I'm not sure if this book was re-edited and a new version was released or something, but somehow this reviewer saw something that I did not see. It was also mentioned that the character Sahalia (who almost got raped) was supposedly portrayed as a slut. I'm going to have to say I don't agree with that statement either. Not one of the characters blamed her skimpy clothing or her attention seeking behavior as the reason she was almost raped. Or said she was asking for it. Or turned the perpetrator into the victim. None of that happened. The characters helped her, defended her, and took care of her until she was well enough to function on her own. Maybe it was changed in a re-edit, I don't know, but I can only review what I read. And I happened to read that review before I read the scene(s) in question, and so I was waiting for it to happen. And it never did. That's it.
I don't know if I can recommend this book or not. Based on the last 50 pages, I would say definitely, but I found a good portion of this book pretty boring. I guess it's your call to make. I will be reading the next one though. I kind of have to know where the story goes at this point.
One of the things that really annoys me as a reader is being constantly treated like a child, or treated like I cannot retain any of the information I read. I found that in a couple of places in Monument 14 the author repeated information that I really felt was unnecessary to keep repeating. Just because it is a YA book doesn't mean teens aren't intelligent. If there is one tip I can give to a new author, it is to assume your reader is smart and knows how to use their brain. Even if they don't. Do not act like as the author you know more than your reader. YOU. DO. NOT. And it pisses me off to NO END when authors are condescending towards their readers. Here's an example of what I am talking about.
Niko half dragged me through the hail, down the "aisle" that was not an aisle but was actually the space above the seats (because, remember, the bus was on its side). What the hell is that? Everyone in America knows the bus tipped over and they had to use the side of the bus as the aisle way. It was enough to know the bus tipped over. But then even before this quote you mentioned it a few times. Then you had to repeat it again here. And that whole "because remember" has me really wanting to punch someone's lights out. That is so friggin condescending. For serious.
The plot? True. What would a book be without some sense of plot? You'll have to look fairly hard for the plot in this book though. Until the last 50 or so pages, there really wasn't much of one at all. And that's kind of a problem. You'll read about the characters sleeping, eating, cooking, and even pooping, but if you are looking for excitement, you might want to skip ahead to page 235ish. Unless you are interested in the process of shampooing lice out of hair. Or how to knock the wall out of a dressing room. By the way, I hope that wasn't a stud wall they knocked down or they are in for some trouble.
One of the issues I had were the fact there were too many characters. Some of them I liked, but for the most part, they all talked the same, all acted the same (especially the little kids) and I had a hard time telling them apart. I think there were like 10 characters. And they were all present from scene to scene and talking. So if you weren't paying close attention, it could get confusing. It wouldn't have been so much of an issue if you could tell them apart through character development, but I really wasn't able to, so something was obviously missing.
Monument 14 did get better towards the end. Once the two adults came into the picture and a plan was made to leave the store, and the mundane every day tasks came to an end, then I started enjoying the book more. The plot picked up and I was finally interested. I still had issues with the flat characterizations, but the story got going, and that was enough for me to bump my rating up from a 2 star to a 3. The last 50 pages really made a difference and now I am wanting to read the next book in the hopes that the story continues to develop in an exciting way.
Before I go, I saw another review that I had to comment on. I rarely ever do this. I don't think I ever have. But because the review (I felt) was so misleading and could put someone off from reading this book that might enjoy it, I have to. You can go ahead and skip this part if you disagree with what I am doing. Another reviewer claimed there was a rape in this book. For the record, there is no rape in this book. There is a situation that almost ends in rape, but it is stopped before it gets that far. I'm not sure if this book was re-edited and a new version was released or something, but somehow this reviewer saw something that I did not see. It was also mentioned that the character Sahalia (who almost got raped) was supposedly portrayed as a slut. I'm going to have to say I don't agree with that statement either. Not one of the characters blamed her skimpy clothing or her attention seeking behavior as the reason she was almost raped. Or said she was asking for it. Or turned the perpetrator into the victim. None of that happened. The characters helped her, defended her, and took care of her until she was well enough to function on her own. Maybe it was changed in a re-edit, I don't know, but I can only review what I read. And I happened to read that review before I read the scene(s) in question, and so I was waiting for it to happen. And it never did. That's it.
I don't know if I can recommend this book or not. Based on the last 50 pages, I would say definitely, but I found a good portion of this book pretty boring. I guess it's your call to make. I will be reading the next one though. I kind of have to know where the story goes at this point.
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Reading Progress
| 05/06/2012 | page 25 |
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9.0% | |
| 05/06/2012 | page 53 |
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18.0% | "Just okay. Not impressed so far." |
| 05/06/2012 | page 73 |
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25.0% | "These characters are flatter than my 6th grade boobs." 4 comments |
| 05/06/2012 | page 87 |
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30.0% | "I don't need an author to repeat the same information to me a hundred times. I'm not an idiot and it makes me angry. This is the second time this has happened in this book." 6 comments |
| 05/06/2012 | page 122 |
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41.0% |
"It's sad that a bunch of people died and all. But do we have to have an entire chapter devoted to this lame ass ceremony? "
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| 05/06/2012 | page 152 |
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52.0% | "Wow. That was a little sexually graphic for a YA novel. Or at least I have never seen it." |
| 05/06/2012 | page 172 |
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59.0% | "Now I get to read about little kids having lice. This novel is freaking riveting. " 3 comments |
| 05/07/2012 | page 199 |
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68.0% | "I find it hard to believe they went through all the bacon already. Do you know how much bacon is in a Wal-Mart? All the different brands? There aren't that many people to eat all that." 12 comments |
| 05/07/2012 | page 216 |
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73.0% | "Uhhhh these men are creepy, y'all. My radar is going off." |
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I can't wait to read your review. I'm surprised you rated it as high as three stars; it seemed like you had a lot of problems with the book.
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I did. It got somewhat better as I continued to read. I was preparing to give it a two star, but I did enjoy the last 50ish pages and I want to read the next one so I thought a 3 was more appropriate.
Same here - I was giving this a mental 2-star for the entire book.. and then the last 40 pages happened. Damnit.
Nice review. Good to know about the Shahalia character. Corruption of a minor is not something I care to read in-depth.Were there any gag-worthy scenes? Or simple I'm-skipping-pages scenes?
I didn't skip anything but I sure wish I had. Nothing gag-worthy, just a lot of boredom and unnecessary details.
Heh, you have my sympathies. My curiosity is going to make me read this book, but at least I know what I'm in for.

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