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Inheritance (The Inheritance Cycle, #4)
by Christopher Paolini
by Christopher Paolini
Inheritance
Book 4 of the Inheritance Cycle
By Christopher Paolini
A Review by Eric Allen
After his early success, Christopher Paolini set to the final book of his trilogy. Unfortunately, for everyone involved, the outline he'd written for the third book wasn't going to fit in a single volume. He decided to split it in two. I have to question why, but I'll get into that later in the review. Now we've finally come to the end with the fourth and final book of the series. Was it a good ending? Well, to be blunt, no, it wasn't. The best I can say is that it IS the end. Thar be spoilers ahead, be ye warned.
I'm not really a fan of this series. I saw the movie and thought it was one of the worst things I'd ever seen. A friend of mine told me that the book was way different and much better. He was right on both counts, though I still didn’t like it much. It was generic, not exceptionally well written, and it blatantly stole from Star Wars so much I had to wonder how Paolini didn't get sued for it. He uses some very awkward, repetative, and inappropriate wording in his imagery, and lingers on describing completely unimportant things as though they are the holy grail. One example from this book is something like three entire pages devoted to the fingernails of a character whose name we never even learn. Why am I still reading this series? Because Paolini, much to my regret, did make a villain compelling enough that I really wanted to see how he would be defeated. One thing I can say about him is that the quality of his writing does improve with each book. That is like saying of two hot pokers in the eye, one of them burns a little less, but at least he's improving his skills, such as they are. Also, you've really got to hand it to anyone that can so consistently steal from other, more creative people and call it his own work with a straight face. That takes balls my friend.
This book was both too long, and too short. That may seem rather paradoxical, but it's true. I would say that at least 70% of this book was padding that was completely irrelevant to the story, and the 30% that actually had anything to do with the story was so underdeveloped because of it that it felt rushed and unsatisfying. The padding made it far too long, and the lack of attention paid to the relevant plot elements makes it far to too short. It’s neither a consistently good book, nor is it consistently bad. It does have some decent moments, albeit, most of them were shamelessly lifted directly from Star Wars, but if you’re going to rip something off, it might as well be quality material.
Inheritance begins with several very one-sided battles that are full of Paolini telling us that there's tension rather than actually building it into the story. The Varden are taking cities from the King on their way toward Uru'Baen. Unfortunately, these are largely completely irrelevant to the story, and basically do nothing but add padding. When your heroes can literally walk over a city wall, wade through an army, waltz into the lord's stronghold, and intimidate the soldiers there simply by the power of their own awesomeness rather than having to fight them, and come out on the other side with little more than a few scratches that they instantly magically heal, what's the point? They're never in anything resembling peril, and that makes these battle scenes extremely boring. I equate the first 300 pages or so of this book to shining a laser pointer in front of a cat, or jingling keys over a baby. It adds nothing to the story, but entertains the easily amused. It feels very Michael Bay-ish. Explosions do not equal a well thought out story, and neither do one-sided battles where there is litterally not one ounce of tension, because the characters are so much stronger than the ones that they are fighting. These sorts of things may dazzle those who don't care about anything deeper than pointless action, like anyone who claims to be a Michael Bay fan, but they'll leave everyone else feeling cheated.
One such battle involves Roran riding a horse halfway across the kingdom to win a battle in less than a week. Why? What was the point to that? It served no purpose to the plot, the city wasn't anywhere near where the characters were headed, obviously, and Roran did not grow as a character during this excursion. After winning, he just went right back to the main army where he was to begin with, having learned nothing, and not having been strengthened by his ordeal. We didn't see any new sides of him, and the entire thing is mentioned in passing maybe twice during the rest of the book. Why? Why did we need to spend 100+ pages on this? We didn't, because it was completely irrelevant to the plot. The only thing of note that happens in the first 300 pages is the acquisition of the completely unpronouncable Spear of Dues Ex Machina, which could very easily have been obtained at Dras-Leona, leaving this entire beginning out all together. Or better yet, not at all, allowing the characters to use their own strength to triumph in the end rather than relying on magical artifacts that basically fall out of the freaking sky into their hands.
After that considerably bloated section of filler, the book's actual plot begins with the siege of Dras-Leona, where Murtagh and Thorn have arrived in defense. As the Varden wait outside the walls, Eragon trains against the elves with his sword, and with the disembodied Dragon Glaedr in strengthening his mind, basically relearning things he has spent the last two books learning. A lot of nothing interesting happens, and then a way into the city is found.
In comparison to the rest of the book, the conquest of Dras-Leona is a relatively well done, and exciting diversion from the hundreds of pages of meh yet to come. A few horrors befall those sent inside to open the gates, placing characters that were basically gods in the first 300 pages in real mortal peril, and the battle itself is rather entertaining if you can turn your brain off for most of it and just roll with Paolini's complete lack of skill in writing action scenes. Pointless gore does not make an action scene exciting, especially if it is not realistic, serving no real purpose except to distract from the fact that there's no real skill put into crafting a compelling battle scene full of tension and horror. It sets the Varden up to strike at the very heart of the kingdom, Uru'Baen, where Galbatorix sits waiting for their arrival.
The defeated Murtagh attacks in the night after the victory and kidnaps Nasuada, leader of the Varden, taking her back to be personally questioned and tortured by the king, in another extremely long and irrelevant plotline that ultimately leads nowhere. Again, why? Why do we need 100+ pages of Nasuada, a relatively MINOR character being tortured? What does this add to the story? I could see if maybe she turned to the figurative dark side, or if she pretended to so she could betray the king at the most opportune moment, giving Eragon the chance he needs to defeat him. But no, she is bound and gagged during the entire final confrontation, contributing nothing except a sudden case of Damsel in Distress Syndrome. Eragon didn't even realize she was there at first. Why was so much time and attention paid to a completely irrelevant subplot like this when there were elements of the actual story that needed so much more fleshing out?
And yes, I know this helps Murtagh to change his true name. I call this irrelevant because all of the relevant character changes happen in HIM. He is the most important character during this part and we focus on HER instead. Therefore, this whole section of the book was pointless.
Following the business model of the Underpants Gnomes, Eragon becomes the leader of the Varden because … and leaves to go hunting down a prophecy that may hold the key to defeating the king. This is another part of the story that, in comparison to the rest, is relatively well done. Eragon flies to the old stronghold of the Riders, seeing for himself the grandeur that was, and the ruin left by their fall. There’s quite a bit of history given, and some decent character development. However, it feels very rushed, and they find a treasure trove of dues ex machina, that basically gives Eragon the ability to stand up to the king without really trying very hard to find a way to defeat or outsmart him. Again, why was so much of this book spent on irrelevant filler, when this part was in dire need of fleshing out?
Eragon races to Uru’Baen and the final battle begins. He enters the city with some elves whilst the army attacks the walls, drawing the defenders. They then sneak past many rather silly traps. The final confrontation is very unsatisfying and rather abrupt. Rather than outsmarting, converting, or utterly destroying the antagonist on his own strength, Eragon relies on the strength of others and literally pulls the solution to defeating the king right out of his ass on the spot without a single prior word or thought on the method. We saw him continuously worry about how to beat the king, but he never actually comes up with any real ideas, so when he does it on the fly, and drawing heavily upon the strength and knowledge of others, instead of his own, it feels as though we’re being cheated. Eragon is not developed well enough as a character for Paolini to pull this off believably. Four books have built up to this moment, and it was completely ruined because he doesn't ever show us any hints of spontaneous brilliance, such as it is, in Eragon's character beforehand. He basically became a different character entirely for a few seconds in order to defeat Galbatorix
The book then spends far too long tying up every. Single. Loose. End. Imaginable. And it is EXTREMELY boring. Yes, your ending should tie up loose ends, but really, some of these should have been addressed earlier in the story so you don’t have them all dumped at the end in a jumble that’s frankly a chore to read through, and also, I don’t know about you, but I actually kind of enjoy when some loose ends are left. It gives you something to ponder over when all is said and done. This ending also heavily steals directly from Return of the King, so badly, in fact, that Tolkien must be rolling in his grave. And there is a huge difference in storytelling here as well. Where Paolini made sure that every single loose end imaginable was addressed in the actual book, making it hugely boring, and a complete waste of a reader's time, Tolkien left most of that junk for the appendices, where a reader didn't actually have to read them, or could skim through and find the specific afterward event that he or she was curious about.
The Good? There were some passably good moments in this book, the events leading up to the battle of Dras-Leona, and the battle itself were ok, as was the trip to the ruined city of the Riders. Although my like of these sections of the book may be largely based on comparing them to the rest of the book, rather than on them actually being good. They really stand out amongst the rest of the book as they are both relevant to the plot, and by the time they rolled around I was literally screaming for ANYTHING relevant. Paolini, as an author, has made some very big steps in developing his talents since his first book, and this one is almost passably adequate, if not for all of the irrelevant filler. In this book, he did seem to actually try taking a few steps away from his shameless stealing from other more talented authors, and the book was much better for it. Though he did return to it in force by the end. He could almost be considered a decent writer if he'd only just put some effort into coming up with his own ideas for stories.
The Bad? The amount of time spent on story arcs for minor characters that ultimately lead nowhere is extremely annoying. The core story needs a vast amount of further developing, and instead of doing so, Paolini wasted hundreds of pages on Nasuada’s storyline, which dead-ends in no actual payoff, and Glaedr’s storyline about overcoming depression and coming to terms with his new life as an inanimate object. Did we really need this? No. These are minor characters that really don’t play a very large part in, or contribute terribly much to, the story, and to spend so much time on them when there were more important things that didn’t get the attention they needed was just plain stupid.
The ugly? Filler. I don’t think I’ve ever seen an author spend so much time of a book this massive spinning his wheels on storylines that had no point at all to the actual story. And in this case, I’m not blaming the author. When he outlined this book he was fifteen years old. The one the blame really falls to is the editor. I listened to the audiobook while at work, and there is an interview at the end between the editor and Paolini, in which she makes incredibly clear that she did not do her job on this book AT ALL. Rather than sending this unfinished mess back to the author with notes saying 70% of this is irrelevant and needs to be dropped completely or developed further to the point that it is relevant, she basically spent the entire time squeeing over it like an excited fangirl. She's probably a Michael Bay fan too. The job of the editor is basically to coax the absolute best out of the writer. They are the ones that understand the mechanics of storytelling and grammar, and tell the writer what work still needs to be done. She failed at that spectacularly. This book is unfinished, and rather than pointing it out to the author like she was supposed to, this idiot encouraged more of it. She dropped the ball so badly that she should be fired on the spot.
If 70% of the book is completely irrelevant to the plot, and can be cut out without even changing the rest of the book to make up for the absence, it’s incomplete. It needs to be cut. Everything up to the siege of Dras-Leona can be completely dropped without missing a single thing of importance, the entire storylines about Glaedr and Nasuada can be dropped without missing a single thing of importance, and almost everything after Eragon visits Brom’s grave, and more than a few things before, can also be dropped without missing a single thing of importance. The fault of this is partly on the author for not really knowing how to lay out a proper storyline where everything is relevant, but the vast majority of the blame lies on the editor. She came at it as a fan, rather than as a professional. She should have sent it back saying to drop all of the irrelevance, and develop the rest of the plot to the point that the reliance on dues ex machina for the climax is minimal to none.
The final book of the trilogy was split in two, Brisingr and Inheritance. Why? Brisingr suffered from some of the same problems of irrelevance that Inheritance did. If everything I mentioned above was dropped from Inheritance, and the 300 page long tangent about the dwarf king in Brisingr had been dropped as it was ultimately pointless as well, this would have fit very easily into one novel. To make matters worse, he broke one of the ten commandments of writing in the previous book, which was a MAJOR problem in this one. Thou shalt not make thine villain so powerful that he cannot be defeated. Again, where was the editor. This is a huge flaw that should have been pointed out and fixed before the third book was even published. Now, there is literally no way AT ALL, that Eragon can triumph without resorting to dues ex machina and plot convenience. He did not learn and grow as a character until the point that he could defeat Galbatorix on his own merits. He used a very large stepping stool provided by others, pulled a baseball bat out of his ass, and hit the king over the head with it when he wasn’t looking.
The entire climax of this book is a complete failure that steals heavily from Return of the Jedi. Plus it takes place closer to the middle of the book than the end. Again, Paolini seems to have completely missed the entire point of the source material that he is ripping off. The duel at the end of Jedi was more about the talking, the temptation, the taunting, with occasional clashes of lightsabers as punctuation to the emotion, climaxing when Luke loses his temper and just starts wailing on Vader, leading him to the realization that he could, in fact, become like his father. This makes his final defiance of the emperor, tossing his weapon aside, all the more powerful, because he's felt the power that could be his if he joined the dark side of the force. This is a poorly xeroxed copy, with none of the meaning or emotion behind it, and no true victory over the enemy, only a hollow shell of one. There's nothing to tempt Eragon. The King keeps saying "join me" and Eragon keeps saying "no". It's meaningless, because there is no attempt by either side at temptation. He hasn't seen the power that could be his, he hasn't felt it flowing through him, he hasn't almost let it consume him and pulled back at the last possible moment in defiance.
One thing I hate when authors do is they will have a character start explaining something and say "ok, this is what I'm going to do..." and then skip the rest of the conversation, leaving the reader in the dark on what is about to happen. It's a crap transitional element that no one should ever use in any medium EVER. Paolini did it at least four times AFTER THE FREAKING CLIMAX OF THE BOOK when there was really no need WHATSOEVER to withhold any information from the reader. He did it several times earlier in the book too. In fact, he did it so many times that I was literally yelling at the audiobook narrator by the end over it. Why? Why would you withold information like that, ESPECIALLY when you go on to reveal it almost immediately afterward. That's just lazy, pointless, and annoying storytelling in the guise of trying to be clever.
In conclusion, this book suffers heavily from an editor that didn’t do her job, and a writer with no concept of relevance. It is an ending to the series, and some people might call it good, though I think a lot more are going to call it bad. Most of this book is just Paolini jingling his keys at his readers, and really should have been cut or developed to the point that it actually was relevant to the plot. I think he felt he had to add filler to this book because there wasn’t enough of the story left to make a full book after the split, but honestly, had he developed the areas of the story that needed it fully, rather than wasting his time with filler, this would have been a much better, if a little shorter, book. It’s not the length that counts, it’s the story. If it’s told well, a great story can be finished in a page, rather than hundreds.
I’m giving this book two stars, because there were some genuinely entertaining moments in it, but they are bogged down by hundreds of pages of completely irrelevant crap that should have been cut. Paolini is steadily improving as an author, and if he ever decides to stop shamelessly stealing from other authors and figures out how to properly use imagery and metaphors, he might make a decent writer of himself someday. When 70% of the book can be completely removed without changing a single word in the rest with nobody noticing it, there is a huge problem that needs a great deal of addressing before the book is ready for publication. Shame on the editor for not seeing past her fandom to the fact that this book needed massive amounts of work still. Someone needs to sit her down and explain to her what, exactly, her job is, because she certainly isn't doing it.
The best thing I can say about this series is THANK GOD IT'S OVER!!! I didn't completely hate it, but I wouldn't say I liked it either.
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Book 4 of the Inheritance Cycle
By Christopher Paolini
A Review by Eric Allen
After his early success, Christopher Paolini set to the final book of his trilogy. Unfortunately, for everyone involved, the outline he'd written for the third book wasn't going to fit in a single volume. He decided to split it in two. I have to question why, but I'll get into that later in the review. Now we've finally come to the end with the fourth and final book of the series. Was it a good ending? Well, to be blunt, no, it wasn't. The best I can say is that it IS the end. Thar be spoilers ahead, be ye warned.
I'm not really a fan of this series. I saw the movie and thought it was one of the worst things I'd ever seen. A friend of mine told me that the book was way different and much better. He was right on both counts, though I still didn’t like it much. It was generic, not exceptionally well written, and it blatantly stole from Star Wars so much I had to wonder how Paolini didn't get sued for it. He uses some very awkward, repetative, and inappropriate wording in his imagery, and lingers on describing completely unimportant things as though they are the holy grail. One example from this book is something like three entire pages devoted to the fingernails of a character whose name we never even learn. Why am I still reading this series? Because Paolini, much to my regret, did make a villain compelling enough that I really wanted to see how he would be defeated. One thing I can say about him is that the quality of his writing does improve with each book. That is like saying of two hot pokers in the eye, one of them burns a little less, but at least he's improving his skills, such as they are. Also, you've really got to hand it to anyone that can so consistently steal from other, more creative people and call it his own work with a straight face. That takes balls my friend.
This book was both too long, and too short. That may seem rather paradoxical, but it's true. I would say that at least 70% of this book was padding that was completely irrelevant to the story, and the 30% that actually had anything to do with the story was so underdeveloped because of it that it felt rushed and unsatisfying. The padding made it far too long, and the lack of attention paid to the relevant plot elements makes it far to too short. It’s neither a consistently good book, nor is it consistently bad. It does have some decent moments, albeit, most of them were shamelessly lifted directly from Star Wars, but if you’re going to rip something off, it might as well be quality material.
Inheritance begins with several very one-sided battles that are full of Paolini telling us that there's tension rather than actually building it into the story. The Varden are taking cities from the King on their way toward Uru'Baen. Unfortunately, these are largely completely irrelevant to the story, and basically do nothing but add padding. When your heroes can literally walk over a city wall, wade through an army, waltz into the lord's stronghold, and intimidate the soldiers there simply by the power of their own awesomeness rather than having to fight them, and come out on the other side with little more than a few scratches that they instantly magically heal, what's the point? They're never in anything resembling peril, and that makes these battle scenes extremely boring. I equate the first 300 pages or so of this book to shining a laser pointer in front of a cat, or jingling keys over a baby. It adds nothing to the story, but entertains the easily amused. It feels very Michael Bay-ish. Explosions do not equal a well thought out story, and neither do one-sided battles where there is litterally not one ounce of tension, because the characters are so much stronger than the ones that they are fighting. These sorts of things may dazzle those who don't care about anything deeper than pointless action, like anyone who claims to be a Michael Bay fan, but they'll leave everyone else feeling cheated.
One such battle involves Roran riding a horse halfway across the kingdom to win a battle in less than a week. Why? What was the point to that? It served no purpose to the plot, the city wasn't anywhere near where the characters were headed, obviously, and Roran did not grow as a character during this excursion. After winning, he just went right back to the main army where he was to begin with, having learned nothing, and not having been strengthened by his ordeal. We didn't see any new sides of him, and the entire thing is mentioned in passing maybe twice during the rest of the book. Why? Why did we need to spend 100+ pages on this? We didn't, because it was completely irrelevant to the plot. The only thing of note that happens in the first 300 pages is the acquisition of the completely unpronouncable Spear of Dues Ex Machina, which could very easily have been obtained at Dras-Leona, leaving this entire beginning out all together. Or better yet, not at all, allowing the characters to use their own strength to triumph in the end rather than relying on magical artifacts that basically fall out of the freaking sky into their hands.
After that considerably bloated section of filler, the book's actual plot begins with the siege of Dras-Leona, where Murtagh and Thorn have arrived in defense. As the Varden wait outside the walls, Eragon trains against the elves with his sword, and with the disembodied Dragon Glaedr in strengthening his mind, basically relearning things he has spent the last two books learning. A lot of nothing interesting happens, and then a way into the city is found.
In comparison to the rest of the book, the conquest of Dras-Leona is a relatively well done, and exciting diversion from the hundreds of pages of meh yet to come. A few horrors befall those sent inside to open the gates, placing characters that were basically gods in the first 300 pages in real mortal peril, and the battle itself is rather entertaining if you can turn your brain off for most of it and just roll with Paolini's complete lack of skill in writing action scenes. Pointless gore does not make an action scene exciting, especially if it is not realistic, serving no real purpose except to distract from the fact that there's no real skill put into crafting a compelling battle scene full of tension and horror. It sets the Varden up to strike at the very heart of the kingdom, Uru'Baen, where Galbatorix sits waiting for their arrival.
The defeated Murtagh attacks in the night after the victory and kidnaps Nasuada, leader of the Varden, taking her back to be personally questioned and tortured by the king, in another extremely long and irrelevant plotline that ultimately leads nowhere. Again, why? Why do we need 100+ pages of Nasuada, a relatively MINOR character being tortured? What does this add to the story? I could see if maybe she turned to the figurative dark side, or if she pretended to so she could betray the king at the most opportune moment, giving Eragon the chance he needs to defeat him. But no, she is bound and gagged during the entire final confrontation, contributing nothing except a sudden case of Damsel in Distress Syndrome. Eragon didn't even realize she was there at first. Why was so much time and attention paid to a completely irrelevant subplot like this when there were elements of the actual story that needed so much more fleshing out?
And yes, I know this helps Murtagh to change his true name. I call this irrelevant because all of the relevant character changes happen in HIM. He is the most important character during this part and we focus on HER instead. Therefore, this whole section of the book was pointless.
Following the business model of the Underpants Gnomes, Eragon becomes the leader of the Varden because … and leaves to go hunting down a prophecy that may hold the key to defeating the king. This is another part of the story that, in comparison to the rest, is relatively well done. Eragon flies to the old stronghold of the Riders, seeing for himself the grandeur that was, and the ruin left by their fall. There’s quite a bit of history given, and some decent character development. However, it feels very rushed, and they find a treasure trove of dues ex machina, that basically gives Eragon the ability to stand up to the king without really trying very hard to find a way to defeat or outsmart him. Again, why was so much of this book spent on irrelevant filler, when this part was in dire need of fleshing out?
Eragon races to Uru’Baen and the final battle begins. He enters the city with some elves whilst the army attacks the walls, drawing the defenders. They then sneak past many rather silly traps. The final confrontation is very unsatisfying and rather abrupt. Rather than outsmarting, converting, or utterly destroying the antagonist on his own strength, Eragon relies on the strength of others and literally pulls the solution to defeating the king right out of his ass on the spot without a single prior word or thought on the method. We saw him continuously worry about how to beat the king, but he never actually comes up with any real ideas, so when he does it on the fly, and drawing heavily upon the strength and knowledge of others, instead of his own, it feels as though we’re being cheated. Eragon is not developed well enough as a character for Paolini to pull this off believably. Four books have built up to this moment, and it was completely ruined because he doesn't ever show us any hints of spontaneous brilliance, such as it is, in Eragon's character beforehand. He basically became a different character entirely for a few seconds in order to defeat Galbatorix
The book then spends far too long tying up every. Single. Loose. End. Imaginable. And it is EXTREMELY boring. Yes, your ending should tie up loose ends, but really, some of these should have been addressed earlier in the story so you don’t have them all dumped at the end in a jumble that’s frankly a chore to read through, and also, I don’t know about you, but I actually kind of enjoy when some loose ends are left. It gives you something to ponder over when all is said and done. This ending also heavily steals directly from Return of the King, so badly, in fact, that Tolkien must be rolling in his grave. And there is a huge difference in storytelling here as well. Where Paolini made sure that every single loose end imaginable was addressed in the actual book, making it hugely boring, and a complete waste of a reader's time, Tolkien left most of that junk for the appendices, where a reader didn't actually have to read them, or could skim through and find the specific afterward event that he or she was curious about.
The Good? There were some passably good moments in this book, the events leading up to the battle of Dras-Leona, and the battle itself were ok, as was the trip to the ruined city of the Riders. Although my like of these sections of the book may be largely based on comparing them to the rest of the book, rather than on them actually being good. They really stand out amongst the rest of the book as they are both relevant to the plot, and by the time they rolled around I was literally screaming for ANYTHING relevant. Paolini, as an author, has made some very big steps in developing his talents since his first book, and this one is almost passably adequate, if not for all of the irrelevant filler. In this book, he did seem to actually try taking a few steps away from his shameless stealing from other more talented authors, and the book was much better for it. Though he did return to it in force by the end. He could almost be considered a decent writer if he'd only just put some effort into coming up with his own ideas for stories.
The Bad? The amount of time spent on story arcs for minor characters that ultimately lead nowhere is extremely annoying. The core story needs a vast amount of further developing, and instead of doing so, Paolini wasted hundreds of pages on Nasuada’s storyline, which dead-ends in no actual payoff, and Glaedr’s storyline about overcoming depression and coming to terms with his new life as an inanimate object. Did we really need this? No. These are minor characters that really don’t play a very large part in, or contribute terribly much to, the story, and to spend so much time on them when there were more important things that didn’t get the attention they needed was just plain stupid.
The ugly? Filler. I don’t think I’ve ever seen an author spend so much time of a book this massive spinning his wheels on storylines that had no point at all to the actual story. And in this case, I’m not blaming the author. When he outlined this book he was fifteen years old. The one the blame really falls to is the editor. I listened to the audiobook while at work, and there is an interview at the end between the editor and Paolini, in which she makes incredibly clear that she did not do her job on this book AT ALL. Rather than sending this unfinished mess back to the author with notes saying 70% of this is irrelevant and needs to be dropped completely or developed further to the point that it is relevant, she basically spent the entire time squeeing over it like an excited fangirl. She's probably a Michael Bay fan too. The job of the editor is basically to coax the absolute best out of the writer. They are the ones that understand the mechanics of storytelling and grammar, and tell the writer what work still needs to be done. She failed at that spectacularly. This book is unfinished, and rather than pointing it out to the author like she was supposed to, this idiot encouraged more of it. She dropped the ball so badly that she should be fired on the spot.
If 70% of the book is completely irrelevant to the plot, and can be cut out without even changing the rest of the book to make up for the absence, it’s incomplete. It needs to be cut. Everything up to the siege of Dras-Leona can be completely dropped without missing a single thing of importance, the entire storylines about Glaedr and Nasuada can be dropped without missing a single thing of importance, and almost everything after Eragon visits Brom’s grave, and more than a few things before, can also be dropped without missing a single thing of importance. The fault of this is partly on the author for not really knowing how to lay out a proper storyline where everything is relevant, but the vast majority of the blame lies on the editor. She came at it as a fan, rather than as a professional. She should have sent it back saying to drop all of the irrelevance, and develop the rest of the plot to the point that the reliance on dues ex machina for the climax is minimal to none.
The final book of the trilogy was split in two, Brisingr and Inheritance. Why? Brisingr suffered from some of the same problems of irrelevance that Inheritance did. If everything I mentioned above was dropped from Inheritance, and the 300 page long tangent about the dwarf king in Brisingr had been dropped as it was ultimately pointless as well, this would have fit very easily into one novel. To make matters worse, he broke one of the ten commandments of writing in the previous book, which was a MAJOR problem in this one. Thou shalt not make thine villain so powerful that he cannot be defeated. Again, where was the editor. This is a huge flaw that should have been pointed out and fixed before the third book was even published. Now, there is literally no way AT ALL, that Eragon can triumph without resorting to dues ex machina and plot convenience. He did not learn and grow as a character until the point that he could defeat Galbatorix on his own merits. He used a very large stepping stool provided by others, pulled a baseball bat out of his ass, and hit the king over the head with it when he wasn’t looking.
The entire climax of this book is a complete failure that steals heavily from Return of the Jedi. Plus it takes place closer to the middle of the book than the end. Again, Paolini seems to have completely missed the entire point of the source material that he is ripping off. The duel at the end of Jedi was more about the talking, the temptation, the taunting, with occasional clashes of lightsabers as punctuation to the emotion, climaxing when Luke loses his temper and just starts wailing on Vader, leading him to the realization that he could, in fact, become like his father. This makes his final defiance of the emperor, tossing his weapon aside, all the more powerful, because he's felt the power that could be his if he joined the dark side of the force. This is a poorly xeroxed copy, with none of the meaning or emotion behind it, and no true victory over the enemy, only a hollow shell of one. There's nothing to tempt Eragon. The King keeps saying "join me" and Eragon keeps saying "no". It's meaningless, because there is no attempt by either side at temptation. He hasn't seen the power that could be his, he hasn't felt it flowing through him, he hasn't almost let it consume him and pulled back at the last possible moment in defiance.
One thing I hate when authors do is they will have a character start explaining something and say "ok, this is what I'm going to do..." and then skip the rest of the conversation, leaving the reader in the dark on what is about to happen. It's a crap transitional element that no one should ever use in any medium EVER. Paolini did it at least four times AFTER THE FREAKING CLIMAX OF THE BOOK when there was really no need WHATSOEVER to withhold any information from the reader. He did it several times earlier in the book too. In fact, he did it so many times that I was literally yelling at the audiobook narrator by the end over it. Why? Why would you withold information like that, ESPECIALLY when you go on to reveal it almost immediately afterward. That's just lazy, pointless, and annoying storytelling in the guise of trying to be clever.
In conclusion, this book suffers heavily from an editor that didn’t do her job, and a writer with no concept of relevance. It is an ending to the series, and some people might call it good, though I think a lot more are going to call it bad. Most of this book is just Paolini jingling his keys at his readers, and really should have been cut or developed to the point that it actually was relevant to the plot. I think he felt he had to add filler to this book because there wasn’t enough of the story left to make a full book after the split, but honestly, had he developed the areas of the story that needed it fully, rather than wasting his time with filler, this would have been a much better, if a little shorter, book. It’s not the length that counts, it’s the story. If it’s told well, a great story can be finished in a page, rather than hundreds.
I’m giving this book two stars, because there were some genuinely entertaining moments in it, but they are bogged down by hundreds of pages of completely irrelevant crap that should have been cut. Paolini is steadily improving as an author, and if he ever decides to stop shamelessly stealing from other authors and figures out how to properly use imagery and metaphors, he might make a decent writer of himself someday. When 70% of the book can be completely removed without changing a single word in the rest with nobody noticing it, there is a huge problem that needs a great deal of addressing before the book is ready for publication. Shame on the editor for not seeing past her fandom to the fact that this book needed massive amounts of work still. Someone needs to sit her down and explain to her what, exactly, her job is, because she certainly isn't doing it.
The best thing I can say about this series is THANK GOD IT'S OVER!!! I didn't completely hate it, but I wouldn't say I liked it either.
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I don't know many people who have finished this horrible novel yet, and your review was exactly everything I was thinking as I forced myself through every agonizing page. Thank you.
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You were merciful in your review. :) I wouldn't hope too much in terms of Paolini's development as a writer. I think he's too conceited to ever stop stealing. But awesome review - I'm glad I'm not the only one who noticed Mr. Fingernails. ;)
Well, I have written a few reviews of late that were nothing but boiling founts of nerd-rage, and I figured I'd try to say something good about this one. Oh, there really aren't enough words in the English language to express how much I hated this book--I used up Goodreads' entire allotted 20k characters and still didn't get around to saying everything I wanted to about it--but I was trying to find some positive in the vast ocen of negativity. You do have to admit that his writing has improved greatly over his previous books. He still uses completely inappropriate imagery, and doesn't seem to understand that other people see the world differently than he does, but I figure, in time, he might make a passibly good author. That's a big might, however, as you pointed out. He probably is far too conceited to see his own flaws, and stop stealing from other writers, and his editor sure as hell isn't going to put an end to any of it. Man, you should have heard her going on about how great he is in that interview. I think she actually, literally, worships him. Her lips are pressed so firmly to his ass that I think they might have actually fused to it.
*laughs* Actually, I thought that his writing has gotten worse, but that may be because his books got longer, and I therefore had to withstand a greater onslaught of said writing. Wow - I will have to find that interview; that is quite disturbing, but it certainly explains how Mr. P got by with SO much.
The interview was at the end of the audiobook. There was no freakin' way I could have actually read this book, it was too awful. I had to take the lazy way out and let someone else read it to me hahaha. I'm sure it can probably be pretty easily found elsewhere, though.As for his writing, I can say without a doubt that it has improved, but that's like saying of two hot pokers in the eye one of them burns a little less. I was reading the books to a mentally challenged cousin recently and have a good recent memory of the progression.
I will definitely have to get the audiobook from the library and skip to it.He may have ceased to use the words "exposed" and "flashing" as much as he once did, but as a writer I don't consider that an improvement. ;)Were you trying to torture your cousin?
Hahaha, no, he liked the movie (poor soul, that movie was actually WORSE than the book) and saw that there was a book and would not stop talking about it until he had it read to him.
Oh ;) The only positive thing I can say about the movie is that it was shorter than the book(s). And Saphira was cool.
Good review. I'm reading this after having read his other three books a long time ago. I cannot believe how irrelevant most of the descriptions are. I also feel like none of the characters are developed at all. For example, Roran, at that part when he goes to capture Aroughs, acts like a complete dick and other times he seems like the hero that he should be.
***Made some changes to the review due to a couple weeks more of reflection on it, and to fix a few gramatical mistakes. The more I think about this book, the more I hate it***
Wow, that was a long review with a lot of filler. :) I remember reading, Eragon and thinking, man this is Luke Skywalker traveling through LOTR. But I still liked it. And I liked all the loose ends tied up at the end of this one. I actually didn't mind all the subplots too, for the most part. I think you were spot on with Roran though. And I also agree that his travels to the island were rushed. In fact I would have read an entire book on Vroengarg alone. I don't know, when isn't a book like this Good vs. Evil, Light vs. Dark, boy becomes man, a hero tempted yadda yadda. With the understanding that this was meant, at least to start, as young adult, I tried to keep that perspective reading it and found it both satisfying and entertaining. But I did appreciate this review,
As the great Charles Dickens likely explained to similar comments about his verbocity. I'm paid by the word. Therefore, the longer I rant, the more I get paid by the literary magazine which I write retro and sci-fi/fantasy book reviews for. That is not to say that I am comparing myself in anyway to a man that could take thirty thousand words to say hello, and people would call it art centuries after his death, but the situations are similar.I do realize that there are people out there who enjoy Paolini's work. And that's fine if you do. I mean no offense to you by this review. Everyone has thier different tastes, and I likely made mine quite apparent on the matter at hand. This review is targeted more toward those who have not read the book and are thinking about it, or those that want to see what other sarcastic things people are saying about it besides their own. Or those who would like to see a rage filled rant on the plot and problems with it rather than reading the book themselves.
The thing about Paolini's work, as you so aptly put, is that Good vs. Evil, Light vs. Dark, Boy becomes man, a hero tempted, yadda yadda, has already been done a thousand times a thousand times, and worse, it's been done better, more originally, and by far more talented writers. I'd much rather read Lord of the Rings, and watch the original (theatrical) Star Wars Trilogy any day over reading a cheap knockoff that completely misses the point that the original material was trying to make, but to each his own. If you enjoyed it, excellent, your time and money was well spent on it. Mine, was not so much.
Well said. Better written, actually, than the books were. He did create an entertaining storyline that (mercifully) didn't require much thought (he painfully spells out everything, as you pointed out) and could therefore be skimmed quickly. I would add that his "borrowing" of ideas extends beyond LoTR and Star Wars, though. McCaffrey is readily recognizable as an influence, as are Jordan, Martin, and Eddings; in fact at times I felt like the filler was the only thing he actually created - the major plot pieces were mostly a patchwork of ideas from better authors. The Eldunari seemed like his (unless anyone knows a source?) but little else.
Light entertainment, perfect for a quick read over the holidays but. It worth rereading.
One positive that I considered though is that it could potentially make a good movie (though I shudder at the thought of more like Eragon). It would condense the high points of the plot and slough off the fluff.
I liked the book better than you did - in fact, I thought it had much less filler and irrelevance than the rest of the books. However, your review still brought up some good points.
I must agree on the filler issue. As far as the rest I like my story, or series to be complete. Leaving questions and making a reader guess and wonder is fine for in between books. It is not fine at the completion of a series. I don't understand why he spent 4 books and too many pages building between Eragon and Arya only to end it on what if's and maybes. In "Eragon" you knew Murtagh and Nasuada were connecting, which only increased in "Inheritance", and by the end another slew of what if's and maybes. Joed didn't ever ride Saphira ,which was promised. You NEVER find out what the Manoea Tree wanted from Eragon. You never find out if Sloan earns the right to speak to Katrina ever again. He left the decision on the Magic Counsel Leader a dead end issue. I don't feel like ANYTHING but the end of Galbatorix was actually completed! I don't have to always have a happy ending, but damn it I at least want a complete one!
See, I think all the loose ends were answered but maybe just not to peoples liking. The Eragon and Arya storyline was simple, they loved each other but will never see each other again. The fact that they never, like, made out or something holds true to Arya's personality in my opinion. I feel like he, Paolini, spelled it out though. Nope, Joed never rides Saphira. Eragon even mentions when he sees Sloan how he sometimes forgets things, I thought that was funny and maybe an inside joke for the author (maybe he really did forget about Sloan until he got to that part?) but it also seems realistic to me that Eragon just forgot all of his promises, he was still very young. Oh well Joed, sorry dude. Now, the Manoea Tree I'm with you 100%, THAT was a cop out. Anyway back to Sloan, Eragon tells him he can watch Katrina and the granddaughter but will never be able to speak to them again, at the end. Sloan seems content enough with the deal and even I thought it was fair as I would have killed the old, dumb bastard in the first place.
Originally, Eragon was supposed to kill Sloan in Brisingr, however, Paolini felt that it was not in character for him, and then spent the entire beginning of that book dealing with it. This is the reason he most often cites for books 3&4 being split. Fun fact, if you were not aware of it.Yes, there are things left undone. What I meant when I said "every single loose end imaginable" was addressed, is that the book ended, and then after the end of the book, he goes on for 300 pages tying up loose ends. It was freakin BORING AS HELL. The story structure was all wrong. The climax is not supposed to happen in the middle of the book. I'm not saying that these loose ends shouldn't have been addressed. I'm saying that they should have been spread out throughout the whole book instead of dumped in a tedious jumble of boringness at the end where it really didn't have much business being when the final climactic event happens more near the middle of the book than the end.
Paolini seems to have no concept of story structure, and when it comes down to it, in my opinion, that is the number one thing on the list that is preventing him from really shining as an author. Oh, don't get me wrong, he does have other flaws, like his inability to understand the difference between main and supporting characters, but his inability to structure his stories is by far the biggest amongst them.
ha, I hear ya Eric. You bring up some really good points. Can't say I disagree other than it just didn't personally bother me. I felt that I had invested so much time reading the four books I didn't mind the ah, "soft" ending. I kinda liked that nobody really got what they wanted to boot. I don't mean that in a bitter way I just thought it all sort of fit and made more sense to the characters involved and circumstances.
I tend to agree with your review for the most part, the major point being he needed a better editor (a little editing wouldn't hurt your review either). The book should have been drastically condensed. I didn't mind the side stories so much, it gives a bigger picture of the overall plot, but it needed to be at least 100 pages shorter. I first noticed the average writing quality with this book, but maybe that's because I'm a more discerning reader now, or the storylines were more compelling in the earlier books. I felt the story was anticlimactic and most of what came after should have been edited down and broken off into an epilogue. Wrap it up for those who want to know, but don't bog down the main story with it. Though it would have been a let down anyway ... For all the hints at romance in the book, NOBODY lives happily ever after. Everyone winds up alone. Not even Eragon and Murtagh get to build a life as brothers and dragon riders together. They all just go on with life, slightly disappointed. As do we. An unfortunate end for a series that started with such promise.
I would have liked less material to read through, and more real resolution, and there was more than one occasion that I thought a transition between two scenes should have been done completely differently, but overall I didn't really think this book was two-stars bad. And yes, I saw the correlation with Return of the King--even more because I happened to watch it and read all the appendices over the holidays. A lot of the themes in Return of the King come from classical and even religious literature, so it didn't bother me too much. Perhaps my reading style, which is rather superficial on the first reading to save time, prevented the same things that bothered so many people from bothering me.
It's more the overall low quality of the writing, and inability of the writer to understand that some things are more relevant than others and thus need more care and effort put into them that pisses me off about this book, not the shameless borrowing from other authors. Again, over half of this book was completely unecessary filler whilst crucial plot elements were virtually ignored. Paolini has no concept of relevance or story structure at all, and his story is generic and uninteresting, full of stereotypical characters that do not realistically react to anything in the entire series. However, it's not the story that prompted me to 2-star this book. It was the fact that Paolini has the writing and plotting skills of a fifth grader. And the really scary thing is that is AFTER he's improved his writing style over 4 books of practice. I don't know how this bozo first got published, but I'm pretty sure it had something to do with the fact that his parents are major shareholders in the company that publishes his books. Simply put, by continuing to play at being a writer he makes a mockery of the publishing industry and belittles the fantasy genre. He's like the Uwe Boll of writing, except where Uwe Boll has the grace to know he's a hack and not give two shits about it, Paolini is surrounded by people who continuously kiss his ass and tell him how great he is. He honestly believes he's a good writer. And that makes his books pretentious as well as being poorly written.P.S. if you don't know who Uwe Boll is consider yourself lucky. Google him if you must, but stay away from any of his movies.
I read this entire series on the behalf of the 10 - 13 year old boys that I teach. Seriously, I have wrist strain from holding up this final (in hardback) novel. Having finished reading the 2000+ pages, I'm too tired to write my own review. I am tempted to just write "see Eric Allen."
Thanks, this review has confirmed my instincts. I put the book down after reading barely 100 pages, muttering to myself that I think I'm done with this series. Your criticisms I think carry through all the books although like you I did notice that his writing improved along the way.One question...when you wrote "He uses awkward repetative and inaropriate wording" were you being humorous and ironic? If so good one, haha, if not I kinda need to tell you that your review was every bit the mirror of your critique, too long, repetitive and in need of a good editor. Once again if this was intentional - good one.
That was meant ironically, yes. Good catch. I was making fun of how Paolini repeatedly describes the same things over, and over again. Just because you use different words to say the same thing doesn't mean you're not repeating yourself etc. etc. etc. Also, I do get paid by the word, so I tend to use more words than necessary at some places. That one was intended as a joke, but other places I do tend to embellish more than needed for a bigger paycheck from the magazine I write reviews for. Paolini, on the other hand, cannot make the same claim for why he goes on describing fingernails for 3 pages.
Just to be sure. The spelling mistakes were meant ironically? Repetative and inaropriate in a sentence critising Paolini for his own grammatical errors? At first I thought it was poor workmanship on your part but when I didn't find any more spelling bloopers I figured they might have been deliberate.
Naw, I just posted it before spell checking, oops. I usually post the draft before the final on goodreads because it takes a couple weeks to get them back from my editor all marked up for final editing. Fixed. =)And for the record I didn't criticize Paolini for grammatical errors... just pretty much everything else. Mostly it was his lack of understanding as to what are relevant plot elements and what are not, his use of sometimes very strange and awkward imagery, his inability to properly structure a story, and his habit of over describing things that really don't need it.
When i first read this, i wasn't so sure what you were talking about when you said that Paolini stole from Star Wars, so i thought back to all the major events that happened throughout the series, and realized that the whole Inheritance cycle is just Star Wars in a fantasy world. I can't believe how perfectly everything in the series lines up with the original three Star Wars movie. Each character in Paolini's books has a Star Wars equivalent. I'm sure you saw these, but: Arya=Leia, Eragon=Luke, Brom=Ben Kenobi, Durza, and later Murtagh=Vader, Galbatorix=Palpatine, Oromis=Yoda, etc. etc. etc...The events thoughrout the series all have their Star Wars counterparts as well.
IN THE BEGINNING:
Arya is attacked by Durza while carrying the egg, Leia is attacked by Vader while carrying secret plans
Eragon finds the egg, Luke finds R2 and C3PO with the plans
Eragon gets Zar'roc from Brom, Luke gets his father's lightsaber from Kenobi
LATER: Eragon rescues captured Arya, Luke rescues captured Leia
Brom is killed by the Raz'zoc, Ben Kenobi is killed by Vader
Eragon and Arya meet up with the Varden in Tronjheim, Luke, Leia, Kenobi, Solo, Chewy meet up with the rebels on Hoth
Empire attacks Trojheim, Empire attacks Hoth
Eragon travels to Du Weldenvarden,learns from Oromis, while the Varden goes to Surda to prepare to attack the Empire, Luke goes to Dagobah to learn from Yoda, while the rebels go to Yavin 4 to prepare to attck the Empire
Eragon meets back up with the Varden, attacks the Empire on the Burning plains, Luke attacks the Death Star with the rebels
LATER:
Eragon confronts Galbatorix, end up fighting Murtagh, Luke lets himself be captured, confronts Palpatine, and ends up fighting Vader
Murtagh helps Eragon kill Galbatorix, Vader helps Luke kill Palpatine
I'm sure you could see all this yourself, but i had to vent.
But while Star Wars had a good ending, and everyone was happy, in Inheritance, everyone was depressed, no one ended up happy, and Eragon just kind of left.
Why? What was that supposed to resolve. Paolini gave reasons for Eragon's departure from Alagaesia, but I don't think they were valid at all. One is that the dragons couldn't be raised in the Beor Mountains because they would eat the Dwarves Feldunost, and anywhere else was apparently too close to civilization. So he leaves. Not a good solution, and a really disappointing ending, but at least it wasn't another Star War rip-off. Quite sadly, the only part of the story he made up himself (the ending), sucked. I'm afraid that if he tries to actually write his own book it will be so awful that the book will disintegrate as soon as you pick it up. But maybe not, and I would like to see what ideas he has of his own. But overall, I'm very disappointed with this series.
No, but R2D2 does set fires for slapstick effect *facepalm* George Lucas... stop smoking crack... Please...?If you're well into the sci-fi/fantasy scene you can see how just about every aspect of Paolini's stories have been borrowed from others. Star Wars and Pern are probably the biggest, though Lord of the Rings gets quite a few jabs too. He even borrowed from stuff like Doctor Who and Buck Rodgers. Honestly, it's a miracle he hasn't had a copyright infringement lawsuit yet, but hey, his books sell millions of copies, so he must be doing something right if I can't quite see what it is...
That's not to say that they can't be enjoyable to some people. If you like these books, good for you, you've not succumbed to the cynacism that has settled into my very soul.
I haven't read the Lord of the Rings, and i really need to. When i was younger my parents never let me see the lord of the rings movies so i haven't read the books either. I plan to soon though, maybe I'll see some things Paolini stole. Eric, have you read any of the Wheel of Time books?
Oh, yeah, the entire ending of Inheritance is straight out of Return of the King.I have read The Wheel of TIme, as a whole I love the series, though there are some very slow parts and characters I wish would die painful, lingering deaths. Namely the entire royal family of Andor. I've been reading The Wheel of Time since the first book came out when I was 11 years old, and The Eye of the World was the book that started me to liking fantasy books, and reading in general.
These books are total rip offs of Lord of the Rings and Star Wars. Blatantly ripped off. What worse is these books are meant for kids, so they may read them before being exposed to the sources, ultimately detracting from their enjoyment of those masterpieces. That's assuming they are able to see the parallels. But your review opened up my mind to even more issues with this series. I knew I was disappointed but I couldn't quite say why. I also was anticipating the green egg hatching for Nasuada. Why didn't he do that?! And the sudden and convenient arrival of the "faith dart"... I think if you had been within a mile you could have heard me rolling my eyes. Sigh. I think I'm over my delving into YA fiction for now.
I have to agree with you on every single point. In fact, I ranted about many of the same points myself. In my opinion, the Inheritance "trilogy" ripped off LOTR even more than Star Wars, though; the races are the same (even the Urgals are like Orcs!), the Ra'zac are like the Black Riders, the Lethrblaka are like their dragonish mounts...Also, I found myself occasionally skipping paragraphs--maybe reading one or two words in them to get the general idea. That's part of the reason I was able to finish the ENTIRE series in 3.5 days.
One more cause for concern is the constant necessity for a recap at the beginning of each book. Paolini had to spend about 5-10 pages at the beginning of every new book to remind the reader of the important points of the book, and the sad thing is that he actually had to do that. I barely remembered the basic storyline because of all the filler.
Nafiul wrote: "Guys....This was writter by a kid too. He started writing when he was 15 for haven's sake."I agree. But it's perspective. I can see Eric and others point. Hey, the kid's made a small fortune off of this story and let's be honest, a lot of it is a rip off. Does it really matter to me? No, I enjoyed the books regardless. But is it possible that the books warrant some of the negative reviews they're getting? Yeah, absolutely. But for me, it's a YA book written by a teenager about dragons and mythical beasts. It entertained me. Wasn't really looking for much else.
To EricI have to agree with you to the fact that this series is not the best series I've ever read, but I still had a good time reading it. The Star Wars analogy was smart, I had never thought of that before, in fact I had to sit on my recliner for about ten minutes thinking about it. This book was pretty bad.
As I said, to each his own. If you enjoyed the series, I'm glad you could have fun with it. I honestly had more fun writing scathing reviews of this series than I did actually reading the books. Paolini is one of thos writers I love to hate, because he makes a lot of jokes I make at his expense so easy.
I think this book was much better than the third, and the first is still my favorite. However, I think you were a little harsh. As for the whole "stealing from Star Wars" thing - what idea is in fact original nowadays? A hero's journey has been written so often that it is literally impossible to write one without bringing something from LOTR, SW, or even Harry Potter! However, the 3rd book was terribly long and painful, and I agree the last 2 books should have stayed as one. The views from the cousin's view was entirely unnecessary until the last battle scene. I thought it was nice having a POV from the fight going on outside. I'll write my own review when I'm officially done the book... I think I have about 15 pages left :-)
Oh, and the whole capture of Nasuada was extremely important because that's when her and Mortaugh developed a bond, which eventually led to the passion he felt in the fight between Eragon. He was fighting for her, which helped his actual name change. He fell in love, and was fighting for something other than himself. He even tells Eragon this at the end of the fight.
Nothing you said changed my mind on the pointlessness of Nasuada's capture. It was faaaaar too long, for basically 0 payoff. She is an extremely minor character to the story despite what Paolini may think, and the fact that there were nearly 200 freaking pages devoted to a storyline about an extremely minor character that added basically nothing to the overall plot except padding is completely unaccaptable. The fact that Murtagh needed all that BS to overcome Galbatorix looks a hell of a lot like god-awful writing/plotting to me. It's bascially just another use of Dues Ex Machina.
Eh, to each their own. I thought the capture was also important because you got to know the antagonist more. Before that Galbatorix was simply an idea, but we got to see him in action - better understand him and see his cruelty first hand. I didn't mind the capture of Nasuada. The whole Roran narration though and other fillers were crap though - I will give you that. Overall I'm glad I read the series. I thought it was good, but if I ever re-read it again, I'll only read the first and last books.
The best thing I can say about this review is THANK GOD IT'S OVER!!! I didn't completely hate it, but I wouldn't say I liked it either. What you said was filler I immensely enjoyed, the capturing of Aroughs was very entertaining. I also liked the story of Nasuada. And I loved everything about Farthen Dur in the previous book.
I couldn't say it was boring. Fight with Hellgrind priests made my heart beat uncontrolably.
I think you expect too much of the book before you read. Why compare it to Star Wars? Dark side of the force thrives on your desire for power. Galbatorix in not like that. He is more of a Jedi, actually. His intentions are good.
If you don't like it, don't read it. Why waste your time. Why become angry over a book you don't like, when you can read books you love.
Ripping off, you say. Everything that was written is ripping off from your inspiration, either from book, nature, or anything other you interact with. I am well familiar with the Star Wars series as I've seen it several times and I am a big, big fan of it. But I've never noticed the similarities unless you pointed them out.
I could say that the girl Elva is a rip off from the Polish great fantasy series "The Witcher", which had a girl named Ciri, similar in age and in her relationship with the main character. In that series there is a character named similar to Triana, also a magician. Main hero's lover is similar to Arya. I could go on. Those are the patterns you can find everywhere, the so called "literary toposes".
Again, everyone is entitled to their opinions, and mine is that this book is unredeemably awful. If you enjoyed it, great, I am well aware that Paolini has many fans even if I cant quite figure out why. I'm glad that you enjoyed the book. Also, 5538858, you probably didn't read it in the comments, and I really don't blame you if you didn't, as there are quite a few of them, I do write reviews professionally, and I do get paid by the word to do so, therefore the longer my reviews are the more I get paid for them, that is the reason for this one being such a length.As to the ripping off, HELL FREAKING YES he ripped things off. There is a HUGE difference between using the same story archetype as George Lucas and what Paolini has done with his Inheritance series. Almost EVERY SINGLE plot point in the entire series came right out of George Lucas' book, and if it didn't come from there it came striaght from Tolkien or Anne McCaffrey.
Why read it? Because I am paid to. I think you're mistaking my doing my job for anger. I'm not angry, I knew this book would be a god-awful piece of garbage before it ever came out, and the cost of the book was reimbursed by my employer. When your expectations are so incredibly low that there's nowhere to go but up, it's really hard to be angry. There's a difference between passion for doing a job that you enjoy doing and anger. In fact, Paolini actually exceeded my expectations somewhat. He did get two stars after all, not one from me.
And if you read the review, you'd see that the fight in Dras-Leona was one of the good points of the book that I mentioned, by the way, so why are you using it as a point against me when we both agree that it was good? If you enjoyed the filler, that's fine, but just because you enjoyed it does not change the fact that it IS filler. I did not enjoy it, and from a storytelling point of view, it was a HUGE mistake on Paolini's part because he filled up his book with a bunch of crap that wasn't exactly necessary, and he skimped on the things that actually WERE. And on top of it it was badly written as well. He IS getting better as a writer, but if his parents didn't own his publisher there is no way in hell these books would have ever been published. He's just not quite up to par as a writer yet.
Again, if you can remove large sections of the book without changing a single word in the rest of it to cover up the absense, the things removed are irrelevant to the plot. No matter how entertaining you found them, they are still compeltely irrelevant. And strictly speaking, anything that is completely irrelevant to the plot does not belong in the plot and should be removed early on in the rewriting stage. That his editor let it pass shows how completely she failed at doing her job.
You have made a lot of very good points Eric in your review. Very in-depth and I agreed with a lot with what you said. This book is terrible and it spits in the face of the fans of the books with the way the series ends. Like with Eragon and Arya don't get me started on them! But people don't bitch and complain because of his point of view. I am a fan of your reviews Eric you have inspired me to start out this blog/reviewing of books, seems like a great way to express your feelings about literature. Keep up the good work by the way just curious who do you work for by writing these reviews?
Thank you =). I write for a small, local literary magazine, and every so often I'm able to sell a review to the local newspaper. It doesn't pay much, hence the reason I still have a "day job". It's just something fun to do in my spare time for a little extra cash.
this was paolini's first series, ever...
and I totally agree with whoever said that this was Luke S. Travelling through the middle earth, that's exactly what I thought.
However, this was the best book in the series, and I liked how all the loose ends tied up.
and I totally agree with whoever said that this was Luke S. Travelling through the middle earth, that's exactly what I thought.
However, this was the best book in the series, and I liked how all the loose ends tied up.
Typically, a writer has to go through countless rejections from agents, editors, and publishers before they finally write a book up to the standards of the publishing industry. This pushes them to improve their skills, and become a better writer. Paolini didn't have to. He wrote a book and his parents got it published for him. There's a whole lot more wrong with this series than simply "it was his first" can account for. True, there are some truly awful books out there, and Paolini is not the only horrible writer to ever get a book published through some fluke. However, had he gone through normal channels like the majority of new writers, I'm pretty sure this series would never have seen the light of day, because Paolini's writing is far too amatuerish. Sure, most writers' first books are nothing to write home about, but the vast majority are far better than anything Paolini has ever produced.In my opinion this is the best written book in the series, but ironically far from the best book in the series. I found the first in the series to be more entertaining, despite it's huge, huge, huuuuuuuuuge flaws. This book was full of pointlessness and long stretches of absolutely nothing happening, and I just can't call it a good book with how much of the page count was completely irrelevant to the story.

