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Crime Scene At Cardwell Ranch by B.J. Daniels

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Crime Scene at Cardwell Ranch was a 2009 publication and is currently being offered for free as an ebook on both Amazon and Barnes and Noble. And free is good. It's the shortest of the 4 Harlequin Intrigues I've recently read, coming in at a brief 160 pages. And I have a bit of a love/hate relationship with it. The love part is for the well-crafted mystery, the confident writing style that moves along at a rapid pace and kept me reading to find out who committed the crimes. The hate part was because of the characters - I disliked every single one of them. Even the hero and heroine. They were unsympathetic, acted in extreme and unbelievable ways, and I was happy to be have them out of my head when the book ended.
As the story opens, Dana is ignoring her 31st birthday and having a bad day. A skeleton has been discovered at the bottom of an abandoned well on her beloved ranch (which her nasty siblings are forcing her to sell), and Hud Savage (his father's name is Brick Savage,and if you can read that without snickering you're a better person than me) has returned to town after a 5 year absence. He was Dana's fiance and the love of her life, but she discovered him in bed with her older sister, and rather than screaming at each other and talking about it, Hud ran to Los Angeles for 5 years while Dana nursed her anger and hatred. Dana also refused to confront her sister. I know, I don't get that either.
As it turns out, Hud and Dana had a slightly creepy history. Early in the story Hud recalls how Dana sent him love letters when he went to college, and when I read (and reread to doublecheck my math!) that she is 5 years younger, I was definitely icked out by a 13 y/o sending love letters to an 18 y/o. A couple pages later Dana recalls how Hud first kissed her on her 16th birthday, making him 21 at the time. If I made a mistake in their age difference and history I apologize, but otherwise...ick. So apparently after being together about 10 years, this awful thing happens, Hud has no memory of waking up in Dana's sister's bed, Dana won't talk to anyone, and Hud runs away.
For the next 105 pages (of a 160 page book!) Dana is alternately furious or a sobbing emotional wreck as Hud becomes a part of her life again as part of the murder investigation. He of course still loves her and wants her back, but Dana has apparently not grown or matured at all in the last 5 years, and is still acting like Hud's betrayal was last night. Lest you think that this dysfunctional relationship is special, let's count the others: Hud has not spoken to his father for 5 years, and his father is a philandering hound dog, Dana's sister Stacy was always jealous of Dana and got Hud in her bed to hurt Dana, their older brother Jordan is a violent, selfish jerk, and their other brother Clay is not really there, as a personality or character. Oh, and their father was also a philandering hound dog.
So why did I keep reading? Because while I found the characters annoying, pathetic, immature or just plain rotten, the mystery of the murdered woman was compelling, page-turning reading. And at 160 pages I didn't want to quit. The murder mystery was resolved, and in a satisfying manner. The last couple pages after that were a forced happy ending - fathers reconciling with sons and daughters, Hud and Dana back together, and the ranch is saved.

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Rubi Jayne I don't think even Hud knows how old he is.

On page 27, he's thinking how 20 years ago he was 16 (making him 36 presently, with the 5 year difference between him and Dana you pointed out) but on page 33 he's thinking how 15 years ago he was 18 and away at college (making him 33 presently, and putting only 2 years between him and Dana, which is much less creepy).


Sarah Jordan Yes, 2 years would be better!


message 3: by Karen (last edited May 28, 2012 12:35pm) (new) - rated it 2 stars

Karen Sarah Jordan wrote: "Lest you think that this dysfunctional relationship is special, let's count the others: Hud has not spoken to his father for 5 years, and his father is a philandering hound dog, Dana's sister Stacy was always jealous of Dana and got Hud in her bed to hurt Dana, their older brother Jordan is a violent, selfish jerk, and their other brother Clay is not really there, as a personality or character. Oh, and their father was also a philandering hound dog."

None of the characters were really there as personalities or characters. There was no background given to why they were the way they were so all the characters stayed one-dimensional. I didn't really care about any of them.

Sarah Jordon also wrote "So why did I keep reading? Because while I found the characters annoying, pathetic, immature or just plain rotten, the mystery of the murdered woman was compelling, page-turning reading. And at 160 pages I didn't want to quit. The murder mystery was resolved, and in a satisfying manner..."

While I agree with your character assessment, I'd have to disagree about the mystery being a page-turner. It was interesting, but not compelling. I figured out the murderer after a few scenes with that character. Plus, the climactic action scene was spoiled by the relationship reveal (view spoiler)[(Dana's current non-sexual companion, who's loved her forever, was the killer's nephew and Dana NEVER knew. How can you grow up in a small town with someone--that is, be their almost-more-than friend for most of your life--and not know who his people are? (hide spoiler)], which seemed ridiculously thrown in to tie up loose ends.

Oh... I found the final "closure" unsatisfying overall. Stuff was tied up in a neat bow, but questions weren't answered and plots weren't really resolved. (view spoiler)[1. I wish we were privy to what the final will said and what that meant for the family and ranch.
2. Having the will fall out of a book in a pantry that was never mentioned previously seemed like a tag-on. Dana's mother's been dead a while and she just NOW looks at their favorite cookbook. Though, I guess I have to be happy it wasn't in the obvious place--the doll. (hide spoiler)]


This book could have been a lot better if the characters had been developed; had the mystery of the will and ranch been developed; and had the typical Harlequin romance been more interesting than it was--two boring people being boring together.

So why did *I* keep reading? I try to finish the books I start regardless of how bad they are. And, though I was pretty sure I knew the killer, I wanted to see how it all shook out. As I mentioned in my review, the book was not bad enough to make me avoid reading another B.J. Daniels book (it was fast and mostly painless), but not good enough to make me seek one out.




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