Very good I think the description was good too but the unrelated more mature stuff might need to be toned down a bit. I loved how the point of view in the story changed from person to person, and when they meet up it is a war game.I like how john comes up with the...... well you might have to find out. The family buisness might be a little much but nana gives good advice but the things that dont relate with the main story could be toned down abit.

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