I thought this book only got interesting about halfway through. A lot of it drags on and on in the beginning. Not much dialogue, heaps of dense paragr...moreI thought this book only got interesting about halfway through. A lot of it drags on and on in the beginning. Not much dialogue, heaps of dense paragraphs about backstory, months etc, and events, but I never felt part of them. It is interspersed with some scenes, but they are small and the rest is boring. This book in no way compares to the first. The first was a masterpiece, the second is a runner up and mediocre. (less)
This book started out so great, but the wheels fell off around the middle, and by the end of the book it had completely unravelled.
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I still don't understand the locket. I don't understand what the author means how she can live two lives and it would have been fantastic for the author to be crystal clear exactly how it works. At one stage the locket made the heroine age, in another it didn't, the heroine could stop time (in which world, I'm not sure) and live in the other world. How she did this, again I'm not sure.
And, at the end she's sleeping in a box? What's romantic about that?
Wouldn't the heroine be classed as a murderer in this world? John Goodwill's grandson saw her face, the fact she was a nurse, and would have given that information to police. So I fail to see how she could live a contended life looking after her grandmother.
Another thing is that the whole plot device of going to search for the locket was detrimental to the story. The romance would have been better taking place at the caravan.
The reason I believe this is because Criminy's life is that caravan, and it took away a lot of his character when they left. The heroine was kind of whiny from journeying. I remember reading the part that they're going to search for the locket and thinking why? Why did the author make them leave the wonderful world of the caravan?
Also, this journey goes to the city, but when they realise John Goodwill isn't there, they go to another far away place, but guess what, he's not there either, so back they come. It was an extremely obvious plot device and lengthened a part of the book that didn't need to be.
The ending had the same problems. The best part was how she figured out to kill John Goodwill. The rest was obscure and vague. The ending went on and on and on, and because it did, nothing was very clear. I started skimming.
It really frustrated me because the beginning was so extremely wonderful and I loved Criminy. By the end of the story, Criminy felt flat, and the heroine, well she had some kind of life, but that wasn't clear either.(less)
Chapter 1: There’s a lot of talk of flushing and crap, double crap, holy crap…which makes me think the characters are...moreThoughts on Fifty Shades of Grey.
Chapter 1: There’s a lot of talk of flushing and crap, double crap, holy crap…which makes me think the characters are, well, going to the toilet to do a number 2. Lots of number 2s. Maybe I shouldn’t be thinking that when the heroine and hero first meet? *** I flush. Of course, I would know this if I had done some research. But holy crap, he’s so arrogant. I change tack.
“That’s a matter of public record, Miss Steele.” His tone is stern. I flush, again. Crap. *** You get the picture. Bad writing, too. As it says Ana changes tack, then it should show her change of direction immediately, but it has Christian’s dialogue.
An editor would have a field day with this book. *** He cocks his head to one side. *** Like a dog?
Ana keeps thinking how arrogant Christian sounds, but it only sounds matter-of-fact. He says he believes good people make his company great. I’m surprised this was published because it’s like seeing a red sign, but the character telling us it is blue. It doesn’t make him arrogant because Ana says he is, the writer needed to show arrogance in Christian’s actions.
Now Ana’s actions…well every door she walks through is an accident waiting to happen, she stumbles. You know who she reminds me of? Candy in Three and A Half Men. Like Berta said, ‘she’s a marble rolling around in a tin can.’ That’s Ana.
I cannot believe how bad the writing is.
Imagine being stuck in Candy’s head from Three and A Half men. Stuck right in there. You hear the ‘do, do, dum, dum, do, do, dum.’ I saw a man with intense grey eyes. He said goodbye to me. He was soooo handsome. And rich. And young. And I flushed. Double crap.
Her mind wanders while she’s driving. ‘do, do, dum, dum, do, do, dum.’
Plus, stuff like this:
“Jeez, Ana, I’m sorry – I didn’t think.”
“Mostly he was courteous, formal, slightly stuffy – like he’s old before his time. He doesn’t talk like a man of twenty-something. How old is he anyway?”
Actually, Christian does talk like a man his age. He’s a business man, too, so that has some bearing. Business men talk like that. Just because Ana SAYS he’s arrogant and doesn’t talk like a man of twenty-something doesn’t mean you can trust her judgement. The writing doesn’t show his arrogant when she thinks he is.
What is this author’s obsession with the word ‘crap’? It’s incredibly jarring.
Transitions are infantile:
She sends me to the storeroom to start re-stocking shelves, and I’m soon absorbed in the task.
When I arrive home later, Katherine is wearing headphones and working on her laptop.
After a short interview, Ana thinks her day is tough because she was holed up with…him. For like twenty minutes. Well that’s what it read like.
She is truly crazy. I’d be worried if I was Christian.
Many actions of different characters are all jumbled in the same paragraph. Like there is Kate’s action grounding Ana’s dialogue. It’s confusing.
*** I flush, and my heart rate inexplicably increases. That wasn’t the reason, surely? He just wanted to show me around so I could see that he was lord of all he surveyed. I realize I’m biting my lip, and I hope Kate doesn’t notice. But she seems absorbed in her transcription. “I hear what you mean about formal. Did you take any notes?” she asks. (Ana’s thoughts, Kate’s speech.)
“Um… no, I didn’t.”
“That’s fine. I can still make a fine article with this. Shame we don’t have some original stills. Good-looking son of a bitch, isn’t he?”
I flush. *** Okay, here in Oz, we blush. If we flush, then we have just gone to the toilet.
*** Crap! I distract her with flattery, always a good ploy.
“You probably would have got a lot more out of him.” *** Sorry to disturb your crap, Ana, but you should actually have the action before the description of said action.
Eg: Crap! “You probably would have got a lot more out of him.” I distract her with flattery, always a good ploy.
Anyway, if I tried to edit this, I’d be here for years…The writing is atrocious. Kate was looking at Ana, then two paragraphs later, Kate glances up again! Kate never looked away! This story has made me use exclamation marks!!!!
*** Holy crap. What the hell is he doing here looking all tousled-hair and outdoorsy in his cream chunky-knit sweater, jeans, and walking boots? I think my mouth has popped open, and I can’t locate my brain or my voice. *** I know where your brain is, Ana. It’s inside that tin can.
Ana has to be the dopiest heroine in history. Because Christian Grey is in the hardware store where she works, she’s about to trip over her own feet again. I’m thinking she should really do a massive face plant on the ground, and put me out of my misery.
*** I kick it out of my head. *** How does Ana do this E.L. James? Maybe you could show us, like on a stage or something.
Please, please…please, do NOT use the word ‘flush’ again! Maybe I can kick that out of my head. Great, the author has obviously realised she’s overused flushed, now she’s on to blushed.
You know, I might write a poem:
There was girl called Anastasia, Thick as two bricks, WSU major She met a rich guy, who liked kink, It was painful for the reader, Watching her think. Crap, double crap, Holy crap! She flushed, blushed and bit her lip, Jeez, That was it.
Does Christian have weirdly long alien fingers? Just asking.
I’m told Christian looks lost. I don’t get to see how. Apparently, it’s a BIG THING – CHRISTIAN GREY’S LOST LOOK.
Ana keeps calling Christian a control freak. He hasn’t displayed any signs of that so far.
However, Ana, wow, she is truly freaky. Think psychotic, immature, vacuous and desperate.
Why did E.L. James have to make Ana so stupid?
Right. I can’t do it. I can’t go on. I give up on this. It’s so badly written, it’s laughable. (less)
1. As Rob Thomas would say: Words are only words, but can you show me something? What was Markus Zusak tr...moreWhat made me give this book such a low score?
1. As Rob Thomas would say: Words are only words, but can you show me something? What was Markus Zusak trying to show me? I don't know. He was too busy telling me everything.
2. Lack of action. I'm told everything that happens. Rarely, snippets of scenes would filter through the telling which is a shame. Markus Zusak has a great command of language with description. He should skewer this talent and tackle action or scenes where things happen.
3. It became boring. The exact moment I stopped reading? Something about Liesel being dressed up in uniform to go somewhere. I don't actually get to be inside Liesel's head, nor the foster father's, so I'm told everything they feel, I don't experience it. The blob on the wall watching it.
4. Flowery language, no matter how sublime, are symbols for experience. These words are meant to show something to me. Meant to convey emotion, experience and a story. These words are meant to connect with feeling and experience. That is what they are showing. I felt nothing but awe with the command of Markus Zusak's language. His command of story is weak.
5. A writer doesn't bring attention to his words, but weaves the story so the reader cannot even see the words. All I saw were words, then maybe descriptive pictures...no story.
6. I believe the author knew how slow it would be with all the telling which is why the novel is interspersed with random fact, random formatting and bits and pieces. It's a slog to get through otherwise. Well, it's a slog with so much telling anyway.
7. I liked Death in this. I was intrigued. However the language got in the way of his story. Readers don't read to form word painting pictures in their minds. They read for experience, emotions and feeling.
8. I'd like the author to go back and try to write this book with scenes, without language that is only there for show and has no direct connection with true life experience. Maybe start with one chapter and turn it into a scene. Still have Death as the narrator, but let us feel Liesel. I have no compassion for her because I've never been in her mind.
9. I have no compassion for Death, either. He's pontificating with words about colours. We get it. Don't smack us over the head with it.
Finally, 10. No matter how many interesting words you have, interesting characters and interesting settings, if you have no story, no emotion holding up your novel, then you have nothing.(less)
Three hours....I read this book for three hours, and it was great at the beginning, but soon the pace was so incredibly slow, it became boring. I star...moreThree hours....I read this book for three hours, and it was great at the beginning, but soon the pace was so incredibly slow, it became boring. I started watching a sports game and that had more conflict.(less)
This was an okay book. A few minor editorial errors that brought me out of the story, but mostly well written. I have to say I liked the heroine in th...moreThis was an okay book. A few minor editorial errors that brought me out of the story, but mostly well written. I have to say I liked the heroine in the beginning, but by the end, I thought the hero should run away... It is tiring to have to constantly read about a hero chasing a partner...to make love etc. She plays hard to get, even when she knows she's had, if you understand. I'm just thinking she's a psycho at the end, will make the hero work for every single kiss, makeout session for the rest of his life. Thus, she hasn't really fallen for him at all.(less)
This was an okay book, but certainly not as good as the first in this series.
Let me elaborate: It has all the right words, but none of the deeper mea...moreThis was an okay book, but certainly not as good as the first in this series.
Let me elaborate: It has all the right words, but none of the deeper meaning underneath. If you've read the first in this series, "Samson's Lovely Mortal" you will know what I mean.
I stopped reading this the moment Yvette has sex with the hero back at Thomas's house. Why? Because the plot itself was weak and didn't connect with their relationship. After all, this is a romance. After they'd had sex or made love or whatever, I knew the story was over. The whole plot with the witch was enough to keep them trapped together somewhere so they could get all hot and bothered about each other, but I didn't believe in it.
The reason for the stars [2 1/2] is because I'm tired of this kind of thing. I'm tired of all the right words where the author THINKS they're needed, but they're empty of deeper meaning. The author nailed it in the first book of the series.