I regularly stumble across a self-published author with a lot of potential, but who needs more instruction in the basics of writing, and Ms. O'Leary dI regularly stumble across a self-published author with a lot of potential, but who needs more instruction in the basics of writing, and Ms. O'Leary definitely falls into this category. While I imagine a good series of editors critiquing her work would have coaxed her to better her writing while also teaching her some rules of the romance genre, by putting out her own books she's lacked this mentoring and it shows.
The major flaw is one of characterization, or lack thereof. The hero is a SEAL, but aside from the most shallow description of his teammates, I'm not convinced that the author has read a single book or spoken to any member of the military to research precisely what type of training or missions this branch of the service must undergo. The heroine is an absolute Mary Sue, with no apparent flaws except her poor self-esteem (only vaguely explained) and her naïveté. Through the entire book, I kept wondering why these two people were attracted to each other.
Which brings me to perhaps the most egregious problem of O'Leary's writing. Romance depends strongly on strong point of view writing so the reader not only understands which character's perspective they are currently enjoying, but also gains a deeper understanding of that person's motivations and perceptions. It was often not only difficult for me to to remember which character's POV I was hearing, but her lack of mastery in writing dialogue meant that I often had to take extra time to figure out who was even speaking! It's impossible to stay in a story when these types of mistakes continually jar you out of it and when there's a struggle to feel invested in a character.
I ended up returning this and another book of hers I purchased. It's my sincere hope that the author continue to expand her talents by taking classes and studying her craft as she is clearly dedicated to her genre and can produce book after book. Hopefully in time her writing abilities will catch up to her imagination but in the meantime, I cannot recommend this novel....more
The writing showed a degree of skill, despite the author appearring to not know the difference between shuttered and shuddered, but I agree with manyThe writing showed a degree of skill, despite the author appearring to not know the difference between shuttered and shuddered, but I agree with many of the reviews regarding the lack of warning about rape issues. There's a fine line in erotica between being erotically overpowered and raped and Acuba trampled all over that line, to the story's detriment. Without the second half of the story where the hero sets her free and helps her in disguise, this story would have none of the appeal that it manages to retain....more
Eve Langlais' story was well-written with a super twist, but I'm afraid it's quality could not make up for the other two stories. Feral Passions startEve Langlais' story was well-written with a super twist, but I'm afraid it's quality could not make up for the other two stories. Feral Passions started off mildly interesting, but it was so easy to put down and I found myself getting bored with the heroine and her issues. The storyline of The Alpha's Woman was more compelling with better drawn characters, but the author made some rather egregious usage errors that kept jarring me out of the story as much as her tiring mythological info dumps did. ...more