**spoiler alert** Excellent, excellent book. Well written and engrossing. I do wonder why the Emperor never sensed Revan's, or even Meetra's, presence**spoiler alert** Excellent, excellent book. Well written and engrossing. I do wonder why the Emperor never sensed Revan's, or even Meetra's, presence but I guess maybe he was too preoccupied with his insanity. I'm glad to have learned how Scourge is still alive in the game because that really had me wondering as I was reading, but why would the Emperor grant another eternal life when his plan seems to be to wipe all life from existence?...more
**spoiler alert** I began reading Deceived 4 Nov 2011 and I have to say that it has been difficult to push myself to read it. The writing style/senten**spoiler alert** I began reading Deceived 4 Nov 2011 and I have to say that it has been difficult to push myself to read it. The writing style/sentence structure is poor, in my opinion, and the battle scenes are even worse, feeling forced and like the author didn’t know how to write his vision. The author also reuses descriptions and words as if he could not find another way to say what he wanted and it comes across as just poor writing, to me. Now, I’m not a good writer in the least, but that does not mean I can’t have an opinion. I’ll insert some of the sentences of examples so you can just read, and hopefully see, why I dislike the writing. Let’s just say I find this book to be an awful read, one of the worst things I’ve ever read. The story itself could have been great, if the book had been written by someone else. The only reason I pushed through was because of Malgus.
“He slipped his respirator to the side and kissed her with his ruined lips, kissed her hard.” Granted that I’m only about 28 pages in but so far, this is one of the worst sentences I’ve read so far. I can’t even come up with words to describe how much this sentence grates me. All of the really short sentences used are bad enough. If I wrote like that. People would jump all over me. And point out the errors of writing that way.
“STILL HEART, still mind, these things eluded Aryn, floated before her like snowflakes in sun, visible for a moment, then melted and gone.” This is another example of a sentence that seems very awkward to me. Like I said, I’m no writer but I know what reads well to me and what doesn’t, and this doesn’t.
“”She shook her head. “Something other than that.” She licked her lips, shifted in her seat.” Short sentences, aaahhh!!!! To me, that last one should be something more like ‘She licked her lips and shifted in her seat.’ This book is full of poorly formed sentences and fragmented sentences, which make it very difficult to take seriously and to read.
“Her eyes fell to the thin hilt of the man’s lightsaber, the bulky, squared-off hilt of the woman’s.” This one needs a transition since Aryn obviously changed her focus from the male Sith’s lightsaber to the female’s.
““Passions can lead to mistakes,” Angral said.” This sentence makes no sense for a Darth to say considering the Sith are all about passion. ‘Peace is a lie, there is only passion.’ I mean, come on! It’s right there in the Sith code. So either the Darth Angral character is supposed to be an idiot or the author screwed up.
In chapter 10, Aryn is watching footage from the Jedi Temple security camera. It’s stated that the main camera faces the doors and this is reinforced when they are watching Malgus and Eleena walk into the temple. Yet, a few sentenced down they are suddenly able to see Ven’s face even though his back was to that camera during the time of the footage they are watching. I think someone goofed, not that it’s the first goof in this book, I’ve seen several misspellings but that’s really not uncommon.
When Zeerid is checking out the Liston spaceport and he reads the name Valor on three Imperial shuttle, he immediately knows they belong to Malgus’s cruiser. Unless the cruiser had the name on it and Zeerid saw it when they were in the tractor beam being pulled backwards, he wouldn’t know because Malgus did not give the name of his cruiser when he hailed Zeerid....more
My copy is actually an advanced reading copy that is uncorrected. It's been a long time since I read it but I remember that I liked it so much I readMy copy is actually an advanced reading copy that is uncorrected. It's been a long time since I read it but I remember that I liked it so much I read it cover to cover in one sitting, which was (and still is) a rare thing for me....more
Don't recall which printing it was but I just read this recently so that I would have more than just the old, animated movie as a reference point. It'Don't recall which printing it was but I just read this recently so that I would have more than just the old, animated movie as a reference point. It's an ok book, not that great but not bad....more