Once again, I can't even review the story because I'm so aggravated by the lack of editing. If I can keep character's names straight, why can't the auOnce again, I can't even review the story because I'm so aggravated by the lack of editing. If I can keep character's names straight, why can't the author? If I notice that someone's dead son who was Richard in one chapter becomes John in a different chapter, you'd think the person actually doing the writing would notice. There were many examples of that throughout the book. If you're going to have a character whose backstory includes 5 ex-husbands and a boyfriend, write their names down somewhere so you don't start calling the boyfriend by the fifth husband's name. Ugh.
This book had potential. It needs a few more drafts though to tighten up lots of inconsistencies in the story....more
This would be a 4 star book except for one glaring, major continuity error. Do books not have editors any more? I seem to complain about poor editingThis would be a 4 star book except for one glaring, major continuity error. Do books not have editors any more? I seem to complain about poor editing regularly.
Anyway, this book read very real. The main character is 16 and the author's depiction of her as both completely self-centered and completely focused on helping her brother I think captures that age perfectly. As an adult reader I wanted to tell her to stop being dramatic, everything is not on her shoulders, and she should talk to her mom. But I think as a teenager I would have fully related to her.
There is alot of profanity and casual drug and sex references. Again, all this feels very real for 16-17 year olds. This isn't a book for my 13 year old, but I think it's good for older teens. And obviously, older-than-teens like me....more
The premise is very good - a psychopath uses Facebook to effect an identity theft and terrorize his old schoolmate.
The execution was at times terribleThe premise is very good - a psychopath uses Facebook to effect an identity theft and terrorize his old schoolmate.
The execution was at times terrible - one of the most poorly edited books I've ever read (maybe this was only a problem with the Kindle edition?) Misspellings and way too many, commas, making it very, hard to read, in places.
I had a couple of nitpicks with the plot as well that I think good editing could have fixed. The attempt to explain why the psychopath was targeting David, the main character, was not believable, and a throwaway line about getting text messages back in high school was jarring coming from the 30-ish David.
All that said, the book was actually enjoyable (when I could wade through the commas). The ending was very satisfying. I wasn't sure if this was meant to be a serious, sinister tale or a dark comedy; it ended up being a dark comedy with several farcical elements (let's just say, the psychopath has a flatulence problem). Again, I think good editing or one more draft could have unified the tone throughout the book....more