**spoiler alert** Since this is my own book I can't really review it unbiased HOWEVER one of my friends who is really into this genre of writing wrote...more**spoiler alert** Since this is my own book I can't really review it unbiased HOWEVER one of my friends who is really into this genre of writing wrote me some comprehensive feedback on 'Bulletproof' that I thought I would post here. All her criticisms mirror mine almost exactly and it was AMAZING to hear what she had to say since this is my first ever book and nobody has ever read my work before...
So I just finished your book. First of all, let me just say well done again on writing a full fledged novel. I really enjoyed the story and plot line, but I read it with a critical intent because I thought I should give you half decent feedback and not just "That was great!" For me personally the female heroine to a story is very crucial, but she is not as important as the leading male of the story. I really liked Gabe. He is exactly the sort of boy I enjoy reading about - appearing aloof and unattainable, but secretly sheltering the scars of a past that has damaged his soul. I did feel however that his transformation between these two stages being revealed was quite rushed, so the impact wasn't quite the same. For Cassie I felt that he feelings for Gabe came far too quickly, it was like she leaped from feeling sorry and attracted to him and then being in love with him in an instant. It was halfway through the book that she realised she loved him, but I didn't feel like there was really any basis for her amount if feeling. He had not really done very much, or said very much worth noticing or life changing. But then... She is a 17 year old girl, and we do jump around a lot with our emotions with no real basis. So it is still plausible, but I probably would have preferred it if their feelings had spoke for themselves, and it was more that I was eagerly waiting for them to admit their feelings; rather than the two rushing on ahead of me reaching that point. I like Maurice too actually, I liked that he was a secret cold blooded killer - his intent actually did surprise me! He seemed like he was going to be the nice, caring boy in a possible love triangle. And then that was wiped off the bored! Haha, really for me that was one of the most surprising bits of the book, so good writing on his character! Very shady indeed. The world this is set in is really intriguing, but I didn't really understand what exactly was going on in it. It seemed like modern times, but with the twist that vampires walk among us, right? I felt that maybe a little more back story on this would have been helpful to the reader just to be able to build the world of the story better in their mind. Maybe about how vampires actually came to be discovered, how they had developed into political organisations and eventually been granted rights the same as humans. Y'know? Just some history on how they went from myth to mundane. I understand that it can be hard to do that when writing in the first person, it's not the style I write in but I've tried before and I found that I often ended up storytelling too much. I did think that this sometimes happened through Cassie, but also recognise that it had to. Otherwise those little hints if detail would be lost so I get that. Overall though, I loved it! It was wonderfully written, I fell in love with the side characters Justin and Channing - they are just perfect. I wanted to steal them. Rose was hilarious and I found myself laughing at the way she would just air brush scenes that had been gloomy with her bright and chirpy attitude. The plot kept me guessing and I liked the new take on vampires. Everyone writes then differently, but I liked that you kept to the basic traditions of them. My favourite scene was when Cassie and Gabe are at their serious argument on the driving lesson. The tension was so well written and I was actually shaking my iPod saying "Tell her what the problem is!" Haha! But yes, loved it! Hopefully there will be a second? Thanks for telling me about it, really enjoyed it xxxx(less)
Had low expectations of this book after reading Delirium, a similar dystopian love story. Thought it would be an average 3-star book, something to get...moreHad low expectations of this book after reading Delirium, a similar dystopian love story. Thought it would be an average 3-star book, something to get me through the week not at work. But I have to say it was phenomenal! From start to finish it was an exciting read. There was the perfect balance of action, fantasy and love. I like romance to be interlaced within a real action-packed novel with crazy ideas and this did it perfectly. Tris was a brilliant character too. Somebody you didn't feel sorry for, she didn't need saved. She was a good heroine but, at the same time, still had her faults. Can't wait to get my hands on Insurgent to see what happens next. (less)
Read it in one day as I couldn't put it down. I was so excited to see what Suzanne Collins came up with as the end to such brilliant characters. So ma...moreRead it in one day as I couldn't put it down. I was so excited to see what Suzanne Collins came up with as the end to such brilliant characters. So many questions needed answering and I was really pleased at how well it was tied up and I can't say I was left feeling disappointed. It was a wonderful ending really. HOWEVER, I was slightly disheartened about how dragged on the first half of the book was considering how rushed the ending was. I would have liked to have seen more reasoning and understanding behind her picking Peeta over Gale because I feel like it was a toss up between them both then at the end she was like I like Peeta and no real depth. I didn't feel totally satisfied on that side of things but I did cry (SPOILER ALERT!!!!)at the epilogue with sheer happiness. Was a lovely happy ending. Would love to see how well the new government in Panem worked...(less)