DNFed; nothing wrong with this, but it seems to be a writing guide for kids who want to write. Which is great! Just not what I was looking for in readDNFed; nothing wrong with this, but it seems to be a writing guide for kids who want to write. Which is great! Just not what I was looking for in reading it....more
DNF at about 16%. Simply couldn't get into the book. I did find the world quirky and interesting, but it seemed to read as a younger YA, closer to theDNF at about 16%. Simply couldn't get into the book. I did find the world quirky and interesting, but it seemed to read as a younger YA, closer to the middle grade range which isn't my cup of tea....more
Okay, so upon reading the above summary, I probably could have guessed that The Scandalous Love of a Duke bDNF review posted to The Bevy Bibliotheque:
Okay, so upon reading the above summary, I probably could have guessed that The Scandalous Love of a Duke by Jane Lark would not work for me. But I was in the mood for some historical romance, it was “Read Now,” and so (without reading the blurb– BIG MISTAKE) I added it to my list.
And now I’m two for two with DNFing my latest reads.
It was just so… GAH. Guys, I’m not even sure that The Scandalous Love of a Duke by Jane Lark was proofread. Why am I having such bad luck with editing of all things? There are commas in the dialogue where there should have been periods. There’s subject-verb confusion. There’s awkward, stilted rhythm to the words in some places and in others, the prose was beyond purple. It was magenta. It was indigo.
In short, it was bad.
To be fair, I’m not sure there’s an editor that could have saved this book. The opening scene with giggling girls spying on boys frolicking naked in a lake had me rolling my eyes so hard I feared that they’d roll across the room. The drama and central conflict felt incredibly contrived, and some of the wording was incredibly anachronistic.
And lord, the info-dumps. WOE BETIDE YOU, INFO-DUMPS.
I made it 6% into The Scandalous Love of a Duke by Jane Lark and going even that far was pushing my patience. Life’s too short for bad books.
Allies & Assassins by Justin Somper is the kind of book that held a lot of promise for me: a fantasy concept of betrayal and death, an interesting chapter set-up, and a cover that is kind of bananas-awesome.
But those things are not enough to hook a reader, and here’s what lead to me declaring Allies & Assassins by Justin Somper DOA– errrr… DNF.
Predictability- I’m not sure if this was intentional or what, but there were “twists” as early in as the first few chapters of Allies & Assassins by Justin Somper… and I saw them basically as each new character was introduced
Distant narration- We go through multiple POVs, which is fine, but we’re distant… especially in the opening chapter which is not only distant, but BORING. Justin Somper seems to have been going for the slow poetic, meandering feel, but missed by a mile. The ruler of the kingdom was just assassinated. A little more urgency wouldn’t have been out of place.
Filtering- So, Allies & Assassins by Justin Somper is written in 3rd person past, which isn’t the closest POV as a rule, but that’s not something that would have ruined it on its own. (While I think that 1st present or past would have helped it, that’s neither here nor there) But there is a lot of “Jared could see” and “Jared felt” going on which only distanced us more. To put me with the character, the writer should have removed that extra layer of distancing… at least sometimes.
Adverbs and adjectives- I LOVE ADVERBS AND ADJECTIVES TOO, JUSTIN SOMPER, BUT JEEZ. To make matters worse, he often used two-four adjectives for one thing (a la “It was ___ and ____, _____ and _____”).
Dialogue tags- Sometimes you don’t need them. And Jesus, sometimes, they can just “say” a thing instead or needing to “inform” or what-have-you.
Repeating unusual word choice in close proximity- When you use the word “conjure” to describe someone imagining/picturing something, I like it the first time. When you do it again a few pages later, I’m rolling my eyes at you.
Basically, internally editing as I read got real old, real quick. This book made an assassin of me– and the victim was my reading of it.
DNF-ing at 31%. The plot's too messy and the MC/writing fall flat for me. The introduction was fun/interesting, but now that the catalyst has enteredDNF-ing at 31%. The plot's too messy and the MC/writing fall flat for me. The introduction was fun/interesting, but now that the catalyst has entered to drive action, it's falling apart....more
DNF at 25%. I hate when this happens... this author is super nice and very helpful, but I could NOT get into this. Narration's very surface level, intDNF at 25%. I hate when this happens... this author is super nice and very helpful, but I could NOT get into this. Narration's very surface level, introspection didn't have much emotion to it and felt like there was a lot of "telling, not showing." I just couldn't connect with the plot or any of the characters....more
Issues in bullet points: -Thrown into Zoe’s struggle/”glitching” without any set-up of her world orPosted to Almost Grown-up
Furthest point reached: 13%
Issues in bullet points: -Thrown into Zoe’s struggle/”glitching” without any set-up of her world or life -Insta-love-esque feel -Hard to suspend disbelief that she was not only glitching, but that it created superpowers in her as well -Finally, a certain scene that seemed like it was written to establish a certain character as “good” and the society as “bad,” but only succeeded in making my feminist feels RISE.
Summation: Some of these are personal preferences while others are, I believe, weaknesses in the plotting. The novel may have improved as it went on, and it may work better for others. But it didn’t enthrall me enough to continue on. Unfortunately, I had to mark it as:
Malora is one of the People, a member of the last human village left on Earth. When the Leatherwings attack and begin killing the People, Malora's healer mother sends her away with her father's horse in an attempt to save her life. Malora builds a herd of wild horses that become her family in the People's stead, until she encounters a group of centaurs...
Oh, how very badly I wanted to love Daughter of the Centaurs. It's got most things that I look for. High-concept? Check. Seemingly strong main character? Check. Blurb from one of my most beloved authors? BONUS check.
Unfortunately, I gave up on it after about 120 pages.
In the early pages, I really thought that Daughter of the Centaurs and I were going to click. Kate Klimo's narration feels a bit distant, but it's written almost lyrically and I looked forward to growing closer with Malora. Unfortunately, the style was not the opening style, but simply the book itself's style and as a reader I never felt that I grew closer with Malora. I remained distanced from her and the writing began to feel awkward and stilted.
As badly as I wanted to connect with Daughter of the Centaurs, it simply didn't happen....more
I could not finish this book and now I'm just annoyed that I wasted $2 on it. The descriptions were overly verbose, the MC's personality was non-existI could not finish this book and now I'm just annoyed that I wasted $2 on it. The descriptions were overly verbose, the MC's personality was non-existent, the dialogue unrealistic. Oh and the spelling. There's a part of me that doesn't even want to TALK about the spelling.
The premise was great. I had been really excited to read it. If she'd done some REALLY REALLY HEAVY editing, I could have enjoyed it because I think it was a great plot idea and a gorgeous cover. Unfortunately, it just didn't pan out well....more