Thank god this was free, because if I had paid for this drek, I would have been really pissed.
The writing was stilted, the characters were flat and unThank god this was free, because if I had paid for this drek, I would have been really pissed.
The writing was stilted, the characters were flat and uninteresting (even the alien with his tentacle-cock), and the sex scenes were rushed (not surprising, considering the length of this story), boring, mechanical, and so not hot.
There were also a number of errors that should have been caught, especially with this being just a little over 3,000 words. Typos, wrong words, missing words, bad punctuation, etc.
Also, I downloaded the .epub version, and the formatting was all fucked up, which made this a real PITA to read. Oh, and the cover art was missing as well.
Is this the quality I'm to expect from her commercial books? Is this the freebie "hook" that's supposed to encourage me to buy the next book in the series, or any of her other books for that matter? If so, it sure as hell didn't work.
If this was a writer who did free online fiction, and was just testing things out, putting their stories into ebook format, I wouldn't be so harsh. But that's not the case here. This is a published author who has a ton of books for sale. Bad writing/story aside... have some fucking pride in how you present your product to your customers. Get help with the editing/proofing, from friends, family, a writing group, the members at the M/M Romance Group (who would be more than happy to help you, for free). Have those people also check the different formats for any problems. And if all that fails, take some of the money you've earned from your outrageously overpriced books, and fucking hire someone to do it.
I am getting so disgusted with lazy self-pubbed authors who put out sloppy, half-assed work. Make the effort, and take the time to do it right, otherwise you're not getting any of my money.
(Oh, and BTW, the title is also wrong/misleading. No one is "bred by the alien". It's the opposite, actually. The alien is bred by humans.) *sigh*...more
**spoiler alert** This one was a DNF for me. So disappointing, because in the beginning I thought it was going to be one of the better offerings from**spoiler alert** This one was a DNF for me. So disappointing, because in the beginning I thought it was going to be one of the better offerings from the Love's Landscapes event.
I loved the setting, which was a very intriguing blend of science-fantasy. The story is told from Reynard's PoV, in a storytelling/flashback style that put me in mind of The Princess Bride. I'm normally not too keen on flashbacks, but I found I enjoyed the way this was done very much. I also love a good enemies-to-lovers story, and these two characters were setting off some major sparks at the start. The bickering and sniping and sexual tension were wonderfully done, and I was loving the hell out of it all. And then the story just choked and died...
They're suddenly bound together (if you blink, you'll miss it), and it's done in a way that felt so incredibly lazy and contrived. Then a little bit later comes the first, brief sex scene, which just left me feeling... meh. After all the insults Reynard had endured from Sebastian, he's suddenly happy-happy gung-ho to jump in the sack with this man? And Sebastian obviously has some serious issues with Elementals. Not to mention, we already got a hint previously that he's had a bad sexual experience with one before, and yet he just passively rolls over and begs for sex? That whole scene just felt so... off, and completely out of character.
And then the scene the next morning was even worse. They both very casually and off-handedly agree that the sex was "pretty good" and oh hey, we should do that again.
Errr... no thanks. At that point, my interest in the relationship between these two instantly evaporated and I had to call it quits. :(...more