Too much hopping around in the timeline without apparent purpose, and not enough scenes that generate any interest. I'm at 48% and don't care about thToo much hopping around in the timeline without apparent purpose, and not enough scenes that generate any interest. I'm at 48% and don't care about the MC or what he's going through. It's been a struggle to get this far. DNF....more
This has been a very simplistic and very cliche (donut-eating cop and tragic, unwilling vampire) read. On the other hand, if you're a vampire addict aThis has been a very simplistic and very cliche (donut-eating cop and tragic, unwilling vampire) read. On the other hand, if you're a vampire addict and like easy reads, then go ahead while this is free to download.
This story suffered from excessive "telling", and a lack of narrative flow. For example:
"I was asked to sit on a dusty Chippendale camelback sofa, which I did. The sofa faced a three-sided bay window with diamond-pane glass. the window overlooked the front lawn and a marble fountain. The fountain was of a mermaid spouting water."
I'm not against setting a scene, but it's hard to get into a story when the narration doesn't flow smoothly, as in the above example.
This is usually enough for me to not finish a free download, and usually I wouldn't review a DNF either. Every book can't work for every reader, as you know.
However, I have to voice my opinion on one other matter. While homophobia can have its place in a story, it has to have a purpose and it should be overcome.
When the main character -- the supposed heroine -- thinks "No wonder it galled him to think his kid might be gay" then she's no heroine. That wasn't the first quesionable line referring to the kid's potential sexuality -- all because he sucks at basket ball -- and the kid isn't a part of the story other than to provide confusing banter between the MC and a cop, so there's no need to be ignorant. It was cliche enough for the cop to be bothered by it, but there was no purpose to the female MC siding with the cop since she argued every other detail of the man's personal life.
Lastly, there were things I couldn't buy into in this story. First, a man is shot in the face and neck, survives, and the cop doesn't seem to have any interest in the situation. Second, the MC suspects her husband of cheating, sees lipstick on his ear, but doesn't do a thing about it (she's an ex Federal agent and a current private dick, she's must be strong for those jobs, so why the antiquated view of men/marriage?)
There were others, but I don't want to rant. I stopped reading at the midway point due to the rough narration and cliche characters, and I didn't feel guilty because of the ignorant side conversation.
I burned out on vampires years ago. I thought I might be ready to return, so take this review with a grain of salt....more
It's not an easy undertaking to write a story about paganism or about transgender life. Putting both together, unfortunately, made the story clutteredIt's not an easy undertaking to write a story about paganism or about transgender life. Putting both together, unfortunately, made the story cluttered.
Both the transgendered aspects and the pagan aspects were well researched, but at the same time there were points where, while the information was solid, I felt it wasn't the best way to present an alternative way of life. I had that feeling mostly with the witchcraft storyline, and I suspect that someone who hasn't studied paganism might struggle to understand Dash and the coven, or get the wrong impressions from some of the scenes.
The story was focused on Dash, being about his growth through the coven and falling for a FtM gay man. Kim was a great character, and I would've preferred the story be more focused on him (as opposed to learning about him through Dash). There aren't enough good transgender stories out there....more