I have to say, briefly, that this is clearly a Star Wars fanfic with the serial numbers badly filed off. On top of that, it's poorly edited with badlyI have to say, briefly, that this is clearly a Star Wars fanfic with the serial numbers badly filed off. On top of that, it's poorly edited with badly chosen vocabulary. After I am through re-reading it and making all my notes about it, I plan a full, in-depth review, but simply put, it reads as bad fanfiction repackaged and sold as original....more
Sad to say, I wasn't impressed with this offering. I felt that most of it was a lot of telling instead of showing, and the language was... simple. WhiSad to say, I wasn't impressed with this offering. I felt that most of it was a lot of telling instead of showing, and the language was... simple. Which might have been mainly due to the telling aspect of the story, using very simple, declarative sentences, which just read awkward at times or just terribly simplistic.
I wanted to feel for the characters, but they were very stiff. They felt more superficially created than deeply emotional. There were many times I felt the narrative cheated by just brushing over events rather than delving into the emotional upheaval Chris (the main character) should have been feeling. But we're told of his emotional upheaval instead of experiencing it with him. William was barely there, brushed aside quickly as soon as he abruptly tells Chris he is dying within the first few pages. He felt very much dead and buried before I was a quarter of the way into the novella, and I didn't like that feeling.
There was a lot of potential here, but I just don't think it quite reached it. There were many points I had to set my Kindle aside and shake my head or have a long talk with my partner about what I was reading, from the TPE behaviors I didn't buy into to wording to so-so sex to squirrely timing near the end. (In fact, I thought all the actual sex could have probably been removed with how glossed over the scenes read.) The whole thing felt rushed, thrown together, and just... wasn't really a satisfying read.
I have to say, though, that I didn't tab out of the novella thinking I'd wasted my time. I'd not read anything by either author, which was part of why I'd picked this one up, and I may try something longer by them to just see if it was the format that didn't work (though the subject matter seemed forced, so that might have also been part of the problem).
That is not to say I don't recommend the novella, only that I didn't care for it....more
There is very little here to pick at, to dislike, to shake my head at.
It's a vampire/were story. But, woUmm... wow? Can I just say that up front? Wow.
There is very little here to pick at, to dislike, to shake my head at.
It's a vampire/were story. But, wonderfully, Watts puts a beautiful spin on it. Makes it original, and in vampire fiction, originality is hard to come by. I was so pleased to read she had completed writing the second book in the series, because I was terribly disappointed to think it would end where it did. I'm actually excited for the next one.
Rik is the prophet of the vampires and werewolves. It's said he will figure out how to unite the two species as well as save the dying race of vampires. He's a well-rounded character, as is his romantic interest, Damien.
Damien, as you can imagine, is the vampire.
It's fast paced, quick, and really well written. There's sex, boy, is there sex, but it fits perfectly in with the pace of the story. I was sufficiently impressed, folks, and I highly, highly recommend the book....more
The description was more than a little misleading. It makes the story out to seem like there is some sort of major conflict as well as evolution for bThe description was more than a little misleading. It makes the story out to seem like there is some sort of major conflict as well as evolution for both characters. Sadly, that is not what happens.
You meet Will. You spend about fifty pages learning about his family, his lifestyle, some of his convictions, and see him have sex with two different people. He leaves food out for the fairies. He doesn't masturbate. He uses biodegradable condoms. And he has children with several lesbian women. He lets his oldest daughter drink and smoke pot and have sex in his house.
Will, it seems, is the ideal hippie in modern day L.A..
One night, Will sees someone in his backyard and assumes it is a homeless person who come in and eats the food he leaves out as offerings. He tells the man he is free to sleep on the porch and leaves out a blanket for him.
This is all interspersed with first person internal dialogue from Fand, the fairy, who is, indeed, the one taking the food offered. And it's not very revealing, these internal moments of narrative, so I find that -- while I enjoy seeing Fand's thoughts -- they don't lend nearly enough to the storyline to be worth the breaking up of Will third person limited narrative. I kept wanting Fand to show me just a little more because he was an absolutely fascinating character.
Of course, as with most gay romance, Will and Fand finally begin a relationship. I loved Fand's absolute innocence, and Will's attempt to retain that, even while they make love. What I didn't like was how Will simply accepted everything without much question. He doesn't really talk to Fand. It's like what my husband accuses me of a lot in my own writing: the author knows everything and assumes the reader does, too. Sorry, but the reader is not in the author's head, so there were many things that were said in narrative that simply didn't make sense because they were never actually explained.
There was no actual conflict. It reads more as a small glimpse of the surface events than anything deep and developing. A good story should always have a conflict -- a clearly defined conflict -- be it external or internal. It didn't exist here. It was mainly a journey, but a journey where neither character actually changed or evolved from their primary start point.
The language and narrative, the storytelling, however, was stunningly beautiful. It was magical and it flowed perfectly. I liked reading the story, and it was only when I was through that I felt that sense of disappointment, of let down, of incompleteness. I had hoped the author had written a second novel that maybe introduced more conflict for the couple, but up searching, I don't think she has.
Overall, I didn't feel it was a waste of time. I was engaged, enjoyed it throughout the reading, and don't regret buying it. However, there was a sense of loss with no conflict, no evolution, and a feeling of abrupt ending....more
It was a pretty decent menage story. Didn't much care for the infidelity bit, but the author made it work. It wasn't bad at all and I recommend it asIt was a pretty decent menage story. Didn't much care for the infidelity bit, but the author made it work. It wasn't bad at all and I recommend it as something to pass the time with....more
I think the most intriguing thing of this story was Martin's issues with oral sex. Call me crazy, but I like reading a character who has an honest-to-I think the most intriguing thing of this story was Martin's issues with oral sex. Call me crazy, but I like reading a character who has an honest-to-God problem with some sexual practice (though his is due to a trauma he didn't quite remember while held captive). It was all right, though the sex became utterly repetitive. I get that it can be hard to write imaginative sex scenes that differ from each other in a book, but... come on. Really. It was the same thing over and over and very, very purple. Overall, not a bad book, not a waste of money, was a decent way to spend a couple hours....more
Pros: The characters were solid. You believed they were real. You were rooting for Kyle and Teague through the whole story. The language was well donePros: The characters were solid. You believed they were real. You were rooting for Kyle and Teague through the whole story. The language was well done, there were limited editing concerns, and the personal romance was great (the sex was hot, I must add).
Cons: The over-reaching plot that was set into place was never really seen to fruition. It left me with a lot of questions, a lot of WTFery, and there was an odd sense at the end of 'Yes, and...?'...more
Pros: Just like Secrets and Lies, you relate to the characters. Cadge (Teague's brother) has to fulfill his end of the bargain he struck with Red in oPros: Just like Secrets and Lies, you relate to the characters. Cadge (Teague's brother) has to fulfill his end of the bargain he struck with Red in order to save Kyle, and so you follow their personal journey. Again, the personal romance (and the sex) were great, and the narrative was just as smooth as before.
Cons: Again, plot elements reiterated in this book, as well as added, don't really see the conclusion you'd expect at the end. The intrigue wasn't very intriguing, and the politics were lackluster. As with before, it ends and I'm left with that expectation of more. I don't know if Ms. Young intends anymore in this series, but I do hope so; I would like to see the questions answered....more
**spoiler alert** Pros: I loved the idea of shifters that were dragons. A+ for uniqueness. I really enjoyed the sense of constant action, and the sex**spoiler alert** Pros: I loved the idea of shifters that were dragons. A+ for uniqueness. I really enjoyed the sense of constant action, and the sex was decent. There were some editing issues that had me itching for my red pen, but overall, I was able to enjoy the feel of the narrative and writing.
Cons: Maybe it's the genre, or the fact these are ebooks, but I'm noticing a pattern of rushed plot. They are romance novels, I understand, but whenever a plot is introduced, you are making a commitment to the reader. That commitment should be honored. This one left me feeling as if some of the action and drama were haphazardly inserted to bulk up the romance. I also feel that the turning of Paul was dubious, and I dislike dubious in my romance reading. You should never do something to someone irreversible without explaining it entirely and completely to them while they are in their right mind. And the fact that Paul simply accepts it sort of ripped me out of my suspension of disbelief....more
**spoiler alert** Pros: The Native American shifter, and the mythos woven into the story, is amazing. The flow of words, the narrative itself, the ima**spoiler alert** Pros: The Native American shifter, and the mythos woven into the story, is amazing. The flow of words, the narrative itself, the imagery -- all beautiful and engaging. The characters are lovely, believable, and you really are swept up in their story. I like being swept up.
Cons: I have an issue when irreversible changes are done to a character without all the consequences adequately explained outside of a sexual situation. It reeks of dubious consent. And the fact that Conner isn't as angry at having choice ripped away from him as one would expect leaves me with that 'WTF' feeling....more
Pros: Oh, originality, by far. The use of a golem as a romantic love interest? A+! Khalid is such an interesting individual, and the writing is done sPros: Oh, originality, by far. The use of a golem as a romantic love interest? A+! Khalid is such an interesting individual, and the writing is done so well that even the minor characters grab you (I would truly love to see a tale revolving around Gray and Douglas). Few editing issues, a solid narrative, and killer characters. The sex was intense, the action kept up, and action is quite difficult to do well. There was a solid plot that was seen through to the end, and it resolved well. The personal, romantic relationship evolved at a good pace, and it didn't feel too rushed. Also, the author's understanding and use of wolf pack hierarchy was excellent.
Cons: The BDSM was off. It was more of a TPE (for those who don't know, that's a Total Power Exchange). While a TPE is a BDSM practice, it is also an extreme one that not many can deal with. I also have to say, it irked me when Khalid told Ian he had to earn the right to aftercare. In the BDSM world, aftercare is an essential aspect of a scene and is never withheld as something to be earned. It is so important. It's when the top receives the feedback of the bottom, and the bottom is reassured that their feedback is necessary and encouraged....more
Pros: I loved the characters. The sensuality was impressive. You could feel the heat coming off the screen. There were some of the most erotic scenesPros: I loved the characters. The sensuality was impressive. You could feel the heat coming off the screen. There were some of the most erotic scenes I've ever read in this.
Cons: The 'BDSM' wasn't really BDSM. It's what I would call mild kink. Kyle goes to Nate for dominance, but there was actually very little of that. But, really, I think that's all I have to say about the negatives....more
Pros: Wow. This was a nice threesome piece. I think it was relatively well handled. I fell in love with Dakota, and I was excited to see that the authPros: Wow. This was a nice threesome piece. I think it was relatively well handled. I fell in love with Dakota, and I was excited to see that the author had written his story. The sex was hot, the little ins into Kyle's and Dakota's lives were interesting, and the drama was kept to a minimum. Loved it.
Cons: Again, not really BDSM, more like kink with a side of wishy-washy dominance. Toy usage and commands don't BDSM make. I also disliked Kyle's focus on penetration and what it would mean if they allowed Dakota that privilege. Coming from a polyamorous relationship, maybe it's my brain that doesn't understand that jealous/possessive vibe....more
This is the story of an ill-defined TPE (total power exchange), and it's done poorly.
For example, there is one scene in whichDear god, this was awful.
This is the story of an ill-defined TPE (total power exchange), and it's done poorly.
For example, there is one scene in which the bottom (Jim) is telling the top (Marcus) he does not want to be flogged. Marcus just steamrolls right over Jim, informing Jim that he knows what Jim really needs. Now, Jim is struggling, crying, making it very clear it is NOT something he wants, yet the author writes it so that Marcus knows better, forcing Jim through it, and when, in the end Jim comes, it's all fine and hunky-dorey.
That is abuse, plain and simple, and I don't like reading about abuse marketed as BDSM.
The only positive thing I can say about is that there were very few grammatical or spelling errors, though the narrative was choppy and dumb. I've never seen a narrative like this, where the whole book is like a stream of consciousness. It's annoying, distracting, and unsatisfying.
It was pages and pages of sex sex forced sex sex more breaking of trust of boundaries more sex sex and more pointless sex.
I found the book insulting, difficult to get through, and completely unsatisfying as money spent....more
This one was... god-awful. I suppose it had a good premise (two lovers reconnect a few years after a disastrous break-up), but the execution of that pThis one was... god-awful. I suppose it had a good premise (two lovers reconnect a few years after a disastrous break-up), but the execution of that premise needed an editor's hand. The grammatical, punctuation, and other errors in general were staggering. I just... OMG, it was downright offensive how many there were.
Even the sex was blah. The author always referred to coming as 'need' or 'heat', which I found strange to read. Their take on what constituted a 'heavy' BDSM scene was also way below par. I found it to be an utter waste of time and money....more