Although I don't like to leave negative reviews in this instance I felt I had to provide a little bit of balance to all the positive reviews.
*SpoilersAlthough I don't like to leave negative reviews in this instance I felt I had to provide a little bit of balance to all the positive reviews.
This book is not at all well written. The author is clearly operating under the assumption that if you write with a thesaurus at your side and every now and again throw in a 'posh' word, your writing will look clever and literary. It doesn't, it just looks like you write with a thesaurus at your side. And it really doesn’t help when you don’t understand the ‘posh’ words you're using. Take this phrase;
“He’d been around long enough to perceive when someone, woman or man, put the make on him”.
Well good for him. However, using “perceive” in that sentence is wrong. You’d never say “I perceived he was putting the make on me”. The word “know” was the right one to use, ie “He’d been around long enough to know when someone…”. It’s unfortunate that the author thought the word “know” was plain and boring and so figured it would be nice to ‘jazz-up’ the writing a bit. Mind you that’s not my favourite one, this is best:
“’I’ve missed you,’ The sentiment spewing from him was so foreign to his ears…”
Spewing sentiment….? Spewing…sentiment?! Bloody hell. I mean volcanoes can spew lava and at a push you could ‘spew forth hatred’ but sentiment?! Spew means to vomit, to expel violently. To attach this description to sentiment…well words fail me.
Then there’s the incredibly turgid writing style and the overdone descriptions:
...“So he knew his unexplainable infatuation with this person wasn’t some sort of instantaneous amour.”
...“a powerful wave surged into Lucky, sweeping him into its aquamarine belly”
...“that nod and the whisper of a word on the traveler’s (sic) lips-only God read what he’d said, for Purly couldn’t-triggered Purly’s pulse into a riotous but luscious sprint.
I’m personally not sure what a luscious sprint is. Perhaps its running through really tall, wet grass. And the last example highlights yet another problem - the author has an apparent need to arrange the clauses of a sentence yoda-style so that it’s a real struggle to read the book.
And that’s before we get onto the characterisation and plotting, such that there is any. The characters are all exaggerated clichés. We have the beefcake ex-racketeer fresh from the joint and just trying to go straight, the poor, abused boy-next-door who just loved the wrong guy, and the knife wielding evil ex with money, power and more addictions than Charlie Sheen. The plot is predictable and full of far too many clumsy devices. For instance lets say you find you’ve written in a problem ex-boyfriend that could cause trouble for our ‘heroes’, only you suddenly realise he’s not needed any more…solution? Have him commit suicide. Much easier than actually having to write a sensible resolution.
To further illustrate just how badly written this is let me give you a quote from one of the 5 star reviews “Because this book is setting in 1930 (NO ONE TOLD ME) I was going to stop reading it” I’m sorry no one explained it was set in 1930? Why would you need someone to explain that it was set…oh yeah, sorry. That would be because the author totally fails to cerate any sense of place or time or atmosphere.
The book actually works better if you read it as a pastiche. So unless your only other option is imminent death from boredom I really wouldn't bother with this book. ...more