(view spoiler)[I've seen this book on Amazon several times over the past few days. Today I decided to buy it. It was cheap at .99 and lookedDNF @ 14%.
(view spoiler)[I've seen this book on Amazon several times over the past few days. Today I decided to buy it. It was cheap at .99 and looked like a good story. While I thought the blurb was a bit silly, I still took a chance.
At 1% I got confused when the story immediately went from the POV of a killer to that of a child. There was nothing separating the two - not even an extra space between paragraphs. I had to read a paragraph twice to figure out what I was reading. This happens several times between the start of the book and where I stopped at 14%.
Then we get to the constant typos, misspellings and just all around horrible editing. By the time I got to 5% of the story my Kindle screen was mostly yellow from where I highlighted mistakes as I saw them. At 14% it was much, much worse.
Then we get to another reason I refuse to continue with this story. According to other reviews - all 5 stars, I might add - Travis is one of the main characters. Travis causes an accident which kills or severely injures Dark's parents right before kidnapping Dark, who is eight, and takes him to a dirty house or warehouse (I didn't read far enough to find out which).
Travis is a killer. I figured that out right off the bat. This is confirmed a little bit into it. However, what I didn't expect to read were scenes where Travis was physically abusive to the kid on-page. I'm going to assume with the length of the book (over 350 pages) that everything takes place over a period of several years. It would have to if the two end up in some type of relationship later. While I get that people can change, and I get that this is fiction, I had to stop reading when Travis decided to punch the scared little boy simply because he (Travis) was angry over something else.
The abuse of the child, on top of the typos that are EVERYWHERE had me stopping. I wasn't invested enough in the story to keep going. And honestly, there's nothing the author could do later to redeem Travis in my eyes. I read a lot of horror and I'm often the type of reader who sympathizes with the bad guy. Strange, I know, but I tend to want to figure out what made the killer the person he became. With Travis all I saw was a hateful bully who used his fists on a little boy.
Again, no coming back from that.
I'm not rating it because I didn't finish it, but I feel that had I done so my opinion likely wouldn't have changed. When I hate a MC early on that hate usually grows until the end. (hide spoiler)]["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>...more
I tried, but I had to stop at 6% because nothing I read up to that point was understandable. The punctuation is all over the place or nonexisDNF @ 6%.
I tried, but I had to stop at 6% because nothing I read up to that point was understandable. The punctuation is all over the place or nonexistent when needed. The sentences are cluttered and run together. There are no breaks in some paragraphs. Tense issues switch back and forth mid sentence. Misspelled words all over the place added to it. I'm going to guess that English isn't the author's first language. This needs more than a proofreader.
If I have to reread the same sentence 5 or more times to try to understand it, it's time to walk away. I'm walking away.
I do love the cover.
Word for word from the story, typos and all -
I got home in desperation waiting for the day to break so that I could call whosoever was to become a starting point for me, and it seemed the night became so long as I looked at the clock since I couldn't sleep. Gradually I dozed off and was woken up by the extremely loud alarm which seemed so loud today because of my hangover, it was past 8 am and I was still struggling to raise my back to the wooden apex of my bed, I felt all the queasiness and headache from my hangover and managed to get up in an hour time, mixed up and none alcoholic beverage to help with the hangover. I took my phone when my sanity crawled back to me and made the call, and when he picked up I said "Good morning and I hope you had a lovely night" expecting a reply I waited but when I heard nothing I went on saying "John told me to call you, I would be so happy to..." he cut me saying "yea I know" he called out an address and asked me to meet him in an hour time.
I cleaned up real good and debated mentally about the best outfit to put on after which I wore a cooperate top with a jacket. ...more
I can handle a lot. Hell, I read a lot of books so not much can make me stop reading at 9%. However, when the MC (an 18 year old girl) descriDNF @ 9%.
I can handle a lot. Hell, I read a lot of books so not much can make me stop reading at 9%. However, when the MC (an 18 year old girl) describes in detail her fantasies about having sex with Angelina Jolie and Brat Pitt, it's time to move on. She does this while masturbating. Normally the latter would be sexy, but Angelina and Brad Pitt? Seriously??? It made me want to gag.
I won't be finishing this.
Note that the blurb has a major typo in it. No offense to the author, but if the blurb has a misspelled word, I can only imagine the rest of the book. ...more
Doesn't every couple immediately jump into having a quickie seconds after being robbed a gunpoint? In their own apartment? Right after the wDNF @ 18%.
Doesn't every couple immediately jump into having a quickie seconds after being robbed a gunpoint? In their own apartment? Right after the woman's prized possession (her Tiffany engagement ring) was stolen? I only mention that because she didn't care much about the "at gunpoint" thing or the fact that she and her man could've been killed. All she cared about was the ring, though she wasn't so upset she couldn't bend over and have great sex.
Another reason I DNF'd so quick is because the editing is so bad I had to reread sentences. Even then I couldn't make sense of most of them....more
A different take on Jack and the Beanstalk. It kind of just starts and runs with the story, with no real info on the main character (Janet) otherDNF.
A different take on Jack and the Beanstalk. It kind of just starts and runs with the story, with no real info on the main character (Janet) other than the fact that she's a tattoo artist who just inherited her aunt's bookstore. She goes to the bookstore and a giant woman appears in the parking lot and tells her to plant seeds in the garden in the back. She does, it grows into a massive beanstalk and of course she climbs it without question. When she gets to the top, she is taken prisoner by two giant men, has sex with one, escapes, saves everyone from a giant creature and from what I am assuming, has sex with the other guy who took her prisoner. I don't know for sure, as I DNF'd when they were about to get it on. The first sex scene was rushed and did nothing for me. Personally, I found Janet to be a complete airhead. Oh, and she's apparently voluptuous and beautiful. I know this because I was told a couple of times. While there was a bit of spanking, I still wouldn't consider this to be much in regards to BDSM.
The editing of this anthology is horrible. Granted, it could have been just my copy but when I pay for a book I expect to be able to read iDNF at 34%.
The editing of this anthology is horrible. Granted, it could have been just my copy but when I pay for a book I expect to be able to read it without getting distracted by having to figure out what is being said. Misspelled words, zero punctuation in some places, paragraphs running together, etc. I only made it through four stories before giving up. Of the four I read, 2 were quite good. The other two were a bit much. I love a good horror story and was really looking forward to reading all ten of the stories in this one. Unfortunately I had to stop after only 4.
(view spoiler)[It takes a lot for me to DNF a book but 32% was more than I could take with this one. I won't be rating it as I didn't finisDNF at 32%.
(view spoiler)[It takes a lot for me to DNF a book but 32% was more than I could take with this one. I won't be rating it as I didn't finish it. It will not be posted on the reviewing blog that I collaborate on. I am merely giving my thoughts on what I've read up to this point and leaving the rest for other readers. The blurb tells what the book is about so I'm not going to.
I've read a LOT of books in my day. A LOT. But rarely do I come across a main character that I hate so much that I know beyond doubt that he can not be redeemed. I get where the author is coming from in a sense but the way in which it is executed leaves a lot to be desired.
Detective Jeff Woods is investigating threats to and deaths of handicapped people... adults and children. He has a prejudice against anyone who he does not consider normal, meaning those with handicaps or those who look different from him or those who are not perfect. He hooks up with a guy (Alex) a couple of times who turns out to be the guardian of a child with cerebral palsy. By the time I got to the "reveal" of Alex's brother being handicapped, I was already disgusted with Jeff's attitude. I would add some of the quotes on here but that would be devoting more time to this 32% that I am willing to do. When he meets Alex's brother, Jeff is a heartless bastard who has the nerve to make comments IN FRONT OF THE CHILD about him being defective. The boy (Sean) can hear and understand EVERY SINGLE WORD being spoken by this asshole. Then Jeff goes on to comment.... AGAIN IN FRONT OF THE CHILD... about the "fucking" that Jeff and Alex had done the night before.
I've hated a lot of characters in my day. I read a hell of a lot of books so of course not all MC's will be perfect to me. However, for an author to write Jeff the way she did and then detail his prejudicial and hate-filled thoughts? And to allow him to do it in front of a child? That did it for me. I get that the point of the book is to show how someone (Jeff) can do a complete about-face and change from being a heartless bastard to being understanding when he falls in love. For me there is no coming back from his attitude and his words from before so to those who are able to go beyond 32%, I wish you luck. I hope he redeems himself in your eyes. For me there was no coming back.
I abhor anyone who criticizes the disabled or anyone "different" from them. Had this been done by a secondary character it would be bad enough. But the main one? Uh, no.
I kept going long after the first time I got offended. I went to bed thinking it would be better in the morning. I woke up and it only got worse the more I read. I will not be finishing this book. (hide spoiler)]["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>...more
I only made it to 44% so I won't be rating this one. I understand it's online fiction so I did not expect an edited version of a great novel. I have,I only made it to 44% so I won't be rating this one. I understand it's online fiction so I did not expect an edited version of a great novel. I have, however, read some pretty outstanding fan fiction so I went into it with an open mind.
I had several issues with this story. There's Dani/Danny, a cross dressing gay teen. Then there's Kevin, the straight jock football player. Kevin sees Dani out in drag one night and then blackmails him/her to keep it secret.
I really tried to get into this but I couldn't. Dani/Danny played the fluttering-eyelash-girl a bit too much. Kevin was just a jerk. A selfish jerk.
The use of he/she and him/her got confusing. When Dani was Dani I understood the she/her thing... had it been consistent. In one sentence Dani was a she and in the next Dani was a he.
Kevin's family ... his father and Uncle Keith... weren't believable, especially the uncle. Neither was Dani/Danny's mother. Being accepting is one thing but come on.
You nod your head yes. You shake your head no. That one is just a pet peeve of mine.
I wish I could finish this but I can't. The editing was so bad that I couldn't make sense of some of the sentences. There are times when I have to chalk a book up to "not happening" and move on. I'm moving on.
This is a DNF at 21% and that bothers me. This is my 5th or 6th book by this author so I was expecting more that what I just read. Granted, I probablyThis is a DNF at 21% and that bothers me. This is my 5th or 6th book by this author so I was expecting more that what I just read. Granted, I probably should have continued beyond where I did but I simply could not. This is not your typical Dana Marie Bell story... or writing. If it was, I would keep reading.
This starts out with a battle of sorts between good versus evil, good angels and bad angels. This alone was quite confusing and I admit to having to reread lines more than once to decipher exactly what I was reading. That was no problem. I reread and I got it for the most part. Then it went on to laying out the other characters who are integral to the story, Abby being one of them and Seth (a good angel) being another. While I could see where the author was going with the two, I could not get beyond the frustrating writing style. This is not the Dana Marie Bell that I've grown to enjoy. This, at times, reads like a first draft of a high school assignment. Too many details in some places. Not enough in others.
I had to decide if I was willing to give up a few more hours with the constant frustration of what I was reading or to move on. I chose to move on.
Because I have loved others by this author, I am aware that she does write outstanding stories so I will not allow this one to prevent me from reading more by her.
This book was provided by Net Galley and Carina Press in exchange for a fair and honest review....more
This one was a DNF for me. I tried. I really tried. But I had major problems with a couple of things.
Jess and Alex have been married for over fifteenThis one was a DNF for me. I tried. I really tried. But I had major problems with a couple of things.
Jess and Alex have been married for over fifteen years. They have two children and have always had a good, stable relationship. One day Jess discovers a sexy book in a bookstore and buys it on a whim. The book is fiction about people engaging in BDSM. Suddenly she is buying as many of these types of books as she can and secretly fantasizing about what happens in each. Her sex life with her husband improves greatly but as soon as he pulls out, she is so full of guilt over her fantasies and her books (that she keeps hidden from him) that she turns away from her husband and distances herself from him. I stopped reading shortly after she told Alex what her problem was and why she has been so distant.
Here are my problems with the story and why it seemed so unbelievable: Fifteen years of marriage. Fifteen. The relationship is described as almost perfect in every other regard than Jess's shyness in the bedroom. What did I see? Total lack of communication. Did I mention they have been married for over fifteen years? While the book explains why Jess is so shy about talking to Alex, I still cannot get beyond the fact that they have a 'perfect' marriage otherwise. If so, I would guess that they communicate on other issues but not in the bedroom?
I'm sorry but I couldn't get beyond that nor could I get beyond the fact that someone (after fifteen years of marriage and having sex) would feel so guilty about fantasizing during sex. I know that there is a chance that the story may have improved had I continued but the other stuff would have overridden that. I'm sure this would be a great story for others but it simply was not for me. ...more
I tried but had to give it up at 55%. Too many mundane, instructional details about massage. I could have handled that had I liked any of the characteI tried but had to give it up at 55%. Too many mundane, instructional details about massage. I could have handled that had I liked any of the characters. I didn't. The MC's did nothing for me and the secondary characters came across as more annoying than entertaining. I guess the story was okay but not okay enough to continue reading with the other things I mentioned....more
This is one of my only DNF's ever. Even if I don't like something, I will normally force myself finish it. Not possible in this case....... and it's aThis is one of my only DNF's ever. Even if I don't like something, I will normally force myself finish it. Not possible in this case....... and it's a short story! This had so much potential. I made it to 65% and had to stop. I couldn't take it anymore....more
I made it almost halfway and that was way more than enough for me. If I still haven't gotten into a story 77 pages in, it is WAY past time for me to sI made it almost halfway and that was way more than enough for me. If I still haven't gotten into a story 77 pages in, it is WAY past time for me to stop reading it. The editing, as I've noticed other reviewers comment on, was horrible. I could have gotten over that. But I could not get beyond the dialogue. And what was the real point of the story? I got the part about the two reformed bad boys who are former lovers meeting again after many, many years. That description made it seem like it would be a good story. Boy was I wrong. Seriously? 77 pages in and I STILL don't get it? Other than the 2 of them meeting up again (quite conveniently, I might add) after 20 some odd years and rekindling whatever sexual relationship they had when they were teens. The sex was bland. Who really says "You rock my world"????????? Do people still say that? Quinn is obviously doing something undercover but the story is not written well. A comment here. A comment there. Wow........... it is really bad. And I've read a lot of books. Do I keep reading even though it bores me to tears? I don't think so.
Okay, I'm obviously not finishing it and I will not rate it because I DIDN'T finish it.
This was my first attempt with this author. I'm thinking there won't be a 2nd....more
So it's marked as finished but I had to stop a few pages in. There is no way in hell I can finish this story. Normally if I hate a book going in, I trSo it's marked as finished but I had to stop a few pages in. There is no way in hell I can finish this story. Normally if I hate a book going in, I try to finish it. I can't in this case.
I really tried to read this book and I just could not get involved. I won it in a first reads give away and I had high hopes for it. But the more I reI really tried to read this book and I just could not get involved. I won it in a first reads give away and I had high hopes for it. But the more I read, the more frustrated I got. I finally had to just put it down uncompleted. It is very rare for me to not finish a book but I had no choice in this case....more