I downloaded this collection of stories when it was available for free on Amazon and I am extraordinarily grateful I did not spend any money on it. I I downloaded this collection of stories when it was available for free on Amazon and I am extraordinarily grateful I did not spend any money on it. I hope Ms. Smith-Nazilli is not overly offended by my extreme dislike of what she considered a publishable work. Part of being a professional writer is coping with with bad reviews however nothing about this work even so much as hints at professional.
I am a firm believer in the sandwich method of feedback, where criticism is sandwiched between praises so, after wracking my brain for a positive comment, I will say that I did not notice any spelling mistakes. However, I almost never notice spelling mistakes unless they are very obvious so take that as you will.
From the unpolished, uninspiring cover that looks to have been produced in under five minutes on Microsoft Publisher, to the awkward writing itself this book is what I would consider a good effort from a fourteen year old.
Good writing allows a reader to relax into it's tone, setting, and rhythm much like a runner relaxes into a smooth jog along an open track. Reading Smith-Nazilli's prose is a bit like trying to run through a chasm filled with boulders and ankle-twisting rocks. There is no rhythm to the writing, no poetry, no finesse. At least once a paragraph you are pulled out of the story, thrown off-stride by awkward phrasing, stilted dialog, or terrible grammar. Partnered either with short, short, shorts that can't even properly be called vignettes or shorts that have almost zero character motivation or development and highly improbable plot points, I was literally gritting my teeth as I read. I hoped the longer, collaborated story would be an improvement over the others but sadly the longer length only highlighted the same immature style of writing.
In the author's note I see that Ms. Smith-Nazilli plans four more similar publications. I sincerely hopes she plans on some method of improving her writing skills and hiring a very skilled editor (if this collection was ever viewed by an editor they need to be sacked immediately).
As my closing compliment I will say that many of the ideas presented in the shorts are intriguing and do arouse curiosity and a desire to know more of the story, if not endure more of the writing....more
I got Silver Tongue while it was free for Kindle but I'd be awfully interested in paying for a paper copy if only so I can loan it out to friends! I wI got Silver Tongue while it was free for Kindle but I'd be awfully interested in paying for a paper copy if only so I can loan it out to friends! I was expecting a rather fun but trope-laden read when I read the premise (smart, headstrong girl chosen to marry insufferable prince) but after the familiar initial set-up the story took several turns for the delightfully unexpected. Characters were well developed, antagonists and protagonists both have strengths and weaknesses and even the "trope" characters are given personalities all their own. The world comes across as being fully formed, without being exhaustively explained. The steampunk aspects are a flavor of the setting, rather than the focal point of the story; which is a refreshing change. I was also very impressed with the fact that the author managed to use quite a bit of in world "lingo" to enrich the setting, but she did so by mainly using conjunctions (evendine = dinner)that are intuitive enough that I was never thrown out of the flow of the story trying to figure out what a made-up word meant. Lastly this story was truly young-adult friendly without feeling either prudish, boring or unrealistic. There is ample romantic tension without anything more than kisses taking place and, while there certainly is violence, it is neither gratuitous or graphic. This is a book I'd be glad to have on my shelves and I'm looking forward to more by this author, I think she has exceptional talent....more