I am sorry to have to give this only 2 stars, but the writing is very amateurish and there are a lot of awkward sentences and grammatical mistakes. ThI am sorry to have to give this only 2 stars, but the writing is very amateurish and there are a lot of awkward sentences and grammatical mistakes. There is also a problem with the way agencies such as the FBI or CIA are portrayed. These agencies just don't operate the way the writer makes them. The situations presented here are like NASA opening the back door to enjoy the spring breezes. Labs which are supposedly sending signals to satellites which interfere with the proteins in the brain and cause heart attacks in a target area simply don't have the lack of security which would allow a 12-year-old kid to break in. You might be able to get by with it in a kids book, but not a book for adults.
There are some interesting ideas in the books and I can't say it was a waste of time, but the writing needs to be more polished, better edited, and better researched....more
I would give this another star, but I couldn't stand the language. I can not understand why authors continue to insult their readers with it. It is baI would give this another star, but I couldn't stand the language. I can not understand why authors continue to insult their readers with it. It is bad enough in a book, but when it's an audiobook it sounds like someone sitting right next to you saying it right in your ear. Couldn't a professional author come up with some more useful adjectives?
The plot itself is not bad. There's a serial killer on the loose and seems to fit the body of a teenage girl, but there is so much going on in her home and school that doesn't seem to fit. The detectives come to realize that there are differences and delve deeper. That is when they find that one of the young girl's friends is Detective Liska's son and he is behaving very strangely. There are a lot of suspects, but none of it makes sense....more
This could have been a good book and with a good editor, it still might be, but there are too many mistakes and characters who are not fully developedThis could have been a good book and with a good editor, it still might be, but there are too many mistakes and characters who are not fully developed. At first, I couldn't put it down. There were some interesting individuals in the pub and other stores and intriguing story lines, but the promise of those characters kind of fizzled near the end.
The ending was also problematic. I think the trouble is that there are some archetypes in human consciousness and if a person is going to act outside those parameters, there needs to be a very skillful character development. I am thinking of Mephistopheles, Screwtape, Old Scratch and those created by Dante, Milton, and Goethe. I am probably putting it awkwardly, but it is hard to make this point without spoiling the book. I would like to see other work by the author, because I see a very creative mind.
I also have to note that dropping the foul language and sexual innuendo would help the book a great deal. Many of the situations call for specific adjectives which would help the reader experience the character's thoughts better than the trite expletives which are repetitive and non specific. ...more