First, the good. The book is properly formatted with no spelling, punctuation or grammar issues. Also, if the author were to keep practicing I think First, the good. The book is properly formatted with no spelling, punctuation or grammar issues. Also, if the author were to keep practicing I think she could be good. Her characterization of Katelyn as a child were pretty good. The thought processes do reflect how a child would try and process what she's seeing.
However, unfortunately, I don't have much good to say about the rest of the book. In the early chapters it's just a series of murders, Katelyn's attempts to escape and that's about it. Sometimes it's hard to tell what age Katelyn is because her thoughts waffle between child, adult and teenager. The characterizations of everyone else around her is just so unrealistic and this type of story hinges itself on realism.
There is no real plot to speak of. Someones gets murdered, Katelyn sees, tries to forget and that's about it for a few chapters. She does try to do some things to get herself taken away from her father. At first I was interested because it seemed a logical and realistic thing to do, especially for the age (sort-of) given. Until it became painfully obvious that the author was trying to isolate the girl to an unbelievable degree. For instance: (view spoiler)[Katelyn begins stealing things in school (apparently teachers commonly bring expensive necklaces and diamond earrings to school), drawing pictures of a coffin, getting in fights, etc. hoping it will get her taken away from her dad. But all it gets her is detention and a three day suspension. So she ups the ante and hits herself with a hammer and then tells a teacher that her father did it. Does this teacher call the cops? Child Services? Nah, she escorts the girl home and flirts with the dad. Very realistic. Then she tries to kill herself but throws up the pills and ends up in the hospital. Do they ask her why? Call a therapist? Again, nah. "A good night's rest" is all she needs and they send her home. She also runs away. Again, just an escort home from the cops. She thinks about telling them about her dad but figures she doesn't have any proof. When two pages before they were burying something in the backyard! and she didn't want to eat vegetables from the garden because there were bodies buried there. Call me silly but I believe bodies and such would count as evidence. All of this happens between the ages of 9-14 (the author isn't clear on the ages quite often and jumps over whole years between chapters sometimes) but nobody thinks to question it. It gets very annoying (hide spoiler)]..
About 50% of the book should be a segment called "Katelyn's Downward Spiral" because it's all about her and her life getting worse and worse. Each chapter is carefully plotted out to show her getting progressively worse with drinking, sex and drugs, eventually becoming a hooker with her friend., Danielle. which brings me to another part of the book that made me want to chuck it out of the window, if it hadn't been an e-book. (view spoiler)[Katelyn finds a newspaper at Danielle's house that has a story about a woman who she saw her father murder during sex. It all comes back to her and she tells Danielle about it. Who, of course, doesn't believe her. So they go off to Katelynn's house (because I'd bring my friend to my house when I knew my father was a sadistic killer) and almost the first thing Danielle does is tell the dad what Katelyn said. Then she has sex with him the next morning. Um, ok? And then she disappears. And Katelyn wonders where in the world Danielle went! Then we have to spend almost a whole chapter while Katelyn tries to find out where Danielle's gone. It's a poor excuse for suspense when even a two-year old could tell what happened to her. (hide spoiler)]
The last 20% is her "itty bitty miracle" that changes her whole life. The perfect cure for psychological trauma, substance abuse, and possible STD's?(view spoiler)[ A baby! *insert dramatic eyeroll here* It also seems to be the perfect cure for addiction because she is magically free of the adverse affects of all the substance abuse she's been partaking in. (hide spoiler)]
After a brief non-tense scene with her father she flees. And yet another time jump ahead to her grown-up and she has a wonderful family and all is happy but, cheesy as it ending there where it should have, the author just couldn't resist tacking on an over-the-top ending.
Since so much is told through Katelyn's point of view I think the story would have been better served being written in a first-person perspective. Because we are told a lot about Katelyn but there is never any real connection with her. Her 'downward spiral' phase is painfully repetitive. It's chapter after chapter of the same thing. All the cliches are checked off one by one. Far too many chapters begin with her waking up or falling asleep. Later it evolves into "And the week went by like this..." , "The following weekend was more of the same...". They are lazy transitions.
I honestly can't recommend this book to anyone. And even though I gave it a terrible review, the author does show some promise if she keeps working on certain areas. I would also recommend a linked Table of Contents. That helps a lot.
First off, I would like to say that I really like the cover. It's creepy and I love the play on names Rathbone/Wrathbone.
Wrathbone: I have to admit First off, I would like to say that I really like the cover. It's creepy and I love the play on names Rathbone/Wrathbone.
Wrathbone: I have to admit that I had to look up the names Henry Rathbone and Clara Harris. It's been a while since history class, lol. When I did, though, I can certainly see what drew the author to the story. It's one hell of a story all on its own. The author does a very good job of blending fact with fiction. My only complaint is that it gets a mite repetitive and could have been shortened just a tad. But it's not like it detracts from the story at all. It's a great story and told well.
The Only Good Lawyer: I really enjoyed this story. It had some really great lines and it would be nice for justice to have it's day, finally. I did have one little quibble with the realism of a certain part but to keep it spoiler free I'll just leave it at that. Suffice to say, it doesn't ruin the story at all and the ending was...very nice, lol.
Dorian's Mirror: A nice take on the Dorian Gray story.
For the Birds: I really didn't care too much for this story. I thought it was a bit over the top and gross just for the sake of gross. This is just my opinion of course, so other people may like it more than I do.
Revenge is a Dish: I have to admit that even though the main character is a complete and utter ass, I did like the story.
I gave it a 3 star but it's really more like a 3.5. A couple of the stories could have been tightened up a bit but other than that they were pretty good. I'd definitely be interested in reading more of the author's work.
I really enjoyed the story. It was a bit of a new twist on an old subject and the writing was very good. I almost didn't read it as the cover didn't I really enjoyed the story. It was a bit of a new twist on an old subject and the writing was very good. I almost didn't read it as the cover didn't look too promising but you know what they say about books and covers. :)
Rarely do I DNF a book. Even if the book isn't very well-written I feel I owe the author at least the courtesy of finishing it before I pass judgemen Rarely do I DNF a book. Even if the book isn't very well-written I feel I owe the author at least the courtesy of finishing it before I pass judgement on it.
This book, however, I DNF'd not just happily but angrily.
My first comment is directly to the author. I would suggest using a different cover for your book. Titles are not copyrighted but images promoting a specific movie are. Just a friendly piece of advice.
Now, as to the book itself, I only got two stories in and while I was not impressed with the first story at all I was willing to give it the benefit of the doubt. Until the second story.
In the second story we're supposedly seeing and thinking through a 13 year old girl's thoughts. A 13 year old girl whose thought patterns waver between sounding like a pre-teen and a very immature adult. A girl who insults people by calling them " 'tards" and describing an African-American social worker as "a fat negro lady called Ruby Rose" who, well, I'll just give you a direct quote from the book and I'm sure you'll understand why I DNF'd it. Hard.
"Do choo feel sad or angry ,,cause what cha Mumma"s gone"n"done?"
I mean, seriously??? Maybe the author thought she could get a pass because her character is an angry little teen. Nope, sorry. An annoying character does not give you the right.
Also, all of the weird punctuation in that sentence is straight from the book. Along with constantly spelling 'yeah' as 'yeh' and other random things like that, I was done.
If I had some advice for the author I would say: get yourself an editor/proofreader, someone to format your book properly, lose the poop/fart/vomit references, lose the all caps on the profanity (and while we're on that subject, I'd lose a bit of that as well).
Also, you might want to brush up on tact, sensitivity, and maturity. Also, try not to steal from other media, you might find yourself on the wrong side of a lawsuit one of these days.