If you can't edit the blurb and make a few sentences make sense, what chance does the book have of being well edited or written? UGH. You have to do bIf you can't edit the blurb and make a few sentences make sense, what chance does the book have of being well edited or written? UGH. You have to do better than this to ask people for money as a reputable publisher......more
A venture capitalist OWNER without partners walks away from his company on the spur of the moment for weeks at time, literally does nothing business related for that time and NOBODY at his office is freaking out? Who does he have set up to sign checks, payroll and legal documents in his office? He is the owner, a Venture Capitalist = a business Shark if he is successful, which by all accounts he is. Every deal he has going has to be at a standstill right now and his secretary just calmly makes hotel reservations for him along the way. His phone isn't blowing up!? He hasn't talked about opening his laptop barely at all. He is constantly amazed how little he thinks of work while he is driving and shirking all his responsibilities. Come on. No way!
Next up. Real Estate. I don't care how rich you are or how sentimental the purchase, I find it extremely hard to believe a Venture Capitalist would pay 2 million over price for a whim...but even if he did, no land/business purchase that big is going to happen in a week. One week. And in a small town like that to not be the biggest news ever? Escrow? Loans? Liens? Property appraisal? Inspection? Really? One week! No business plan? No review of the books, the contracts, the process? No agreement with the owners to stick around until he understands the business or anything else about the purchase? The city doesn't even care about this? A winery is a big of land to just hand over. What if he wanted to turn it into a housing tract or a warehouse or a strip bar?
So next, the son, who is close and in good standing with his parents and lives in the same small, small town with his parents doesn't get included in any discussion whatsoever of them selling the family winery and retiring 10 hours away? And this small town boy finds out about the sale when West (said purchaser) drives out to his tree farm and drops the "I've bought the winery" on him and West doesn't even seem to realize the guy he is asking for help is the son of the family he bought it from? Rush may have found out sooner if he had returned the several calls from his friend (that he was worried about because he was acting funny) sooner than three days after all the message were left for him. There isn't anything to like about Rush at this point and he gets worse.
There are so many more issues. The phone call to his mother after finding out. "Hey can we meet for lunch?" Seriously? (hide spoiler)]
Finally, Rush is extremely judgmental and crass. His conversation with West, a perfect stranger, in the grocery store over spilled sour cream is in such poor taste I can't begin to like the guy. What an asshole. And to lecture West about small town gossip when he didn't even find out about the sale in his small town is the height of irony.
I want to get to the parts the reviews are telling me are good but I'm 8 chapters in and I haven't found any.
This pet peeve of plot holes and insufficient research drives me bonkers. I blame it on the author, the lack of research is lazy, but I also blame it on non critical beta readers, editors and others that just push books through the publishing door as fast as possible. None of the problems above were insurmountable to fix nor are they small, unimportant or insignificant. One easy question (and the rewrite to go with it) fixes it and allows West to still be spontaneous and a credible businessman at the same time. Why did everything West did so far have to happen in a two week span? Why couldn't any of his decisions been made simultaneously while he was on the road to take care of the ashes? Is he not capable of multitasking?
So...now I have to decide if this goes in my DNF pile because I hate Rush and I don't believe any of the ridiculous plot devices that brought West to this place or hope that things can improve.
I tried to continue but I didn't find anything else that I could use to get past Rush being such an asshole.
Sadly, this is one I'm just not going to finish. ...more
For real, please don't write about something you have no idea about and have no intentions of researching.
The authors portrayalDo your damn research!
For real, please don't write about something you have no idea about and have no intentions of researching.
The authors portrayal of anything EOD related and/or Army related is so ridiculous it's insulting to the real EOD Techs out there. At first, I admit that I (actual EOD Tech/Instructor) was rolling on the floor laughing at the completely implausible description of the "roadside bomb/mortar/wires/pliers" event. Simple research would have precluded any inclusion of two onsite EOD techs working on a bomb together and a "drop zone" rendezvous as is portrayed is utter nonsense, wrong terminology aside. The powdery ash smell of a fire retardant suit...what the hell is that? Ummm. Also, if a mortar blew up while a tech was working on top of it, there might be an "uncut cock" to look at but it very likely wouldn't still be attached to anything. Neither one of those guys would be thinking about any kind of sex if they had survived it. Stripping would be a non issue.
The rest of the excerpt is chaotic and dangerously ignorant and seems to portray EOD techs as rapists of some kind. The story slightly makes that better, but not by much. The excerpt is simply horrendous.
All in all, this portrayal is actually beyond insulting. EOD trained soldiers are not idiots. They train in one of the hardest schools in the US Military to do this very dangerous job as safely as possible. Nor are they rampaging rapists, please don't portray them as though they are. Pick a make believe military job if you are going to write something you have no intention of researching.
I auto buy Jaime Samms books - lets just get that out there. I have enjoyed most of her books so far. I expect great things. That said, I'm strugglingI auto buy Jaime Samms books - lets just get that out there. I have enjoyed most of her books so far. I expect great things. That said, I'm struggling with this one. Sadly, I'm not going to finish.
Gregor, the bodyguard and owner of the security service is the worst bodyguard and security company ever. Ever. There seems to be no understanding whatsoever of security protocol, not even the most basic kind garnered from watching police procedural tv shows. Where were the beta readers to point out the issues with the way events are unfolding?
I'm on page 60 and there are so many security mistakes and holes in the events that have happened so far, I'm kinda done. Really, Gregor should have been fired on page 10. Immediately. Including his whole "team" that is utterly useless.
1. Nobody is watching the trailer when Cody isn't in it? What is the security team for?
2. Gregor can walk away from his security post to go to the bathroom and doesn't have anybody to watch the trailer while he's gone when Cody and Bruce are in it? What is the security team for?
3. Calling the police is optional when threats continue to come right to your door?
4. Two band members can be shot in the middle of a concert and there is no forensic investigation and no mention whatsoever of how someone could do that and not be seen/heard when it happens? No police investigation? No panic or stampede in the arena? No real mention of the media storm that this would cause and the PR issues that would be practically unmanageable. (there is some media issues getting Cody out of the hospital but it's resolved by Gregor having a plan to have a blood loss and stitched up patient, Cody, walk down 3 flights of stairs to the hospital alley, huh. Don't worry, there was a lot of paperwork to allow it by the hospital, so it's all good)
And this is just to page 60. Based on the blurb there is only more silly accusation to come when it comes to Gregor. (hide spoiler)]
Maybe I need to give it more time, but I can't suspend disbelief anymore. I'm just getting to the sex and the whole submission aspect seems rushed and ridiculous. Usually this author writes very hot sex scenes so I'm kinda bummed to miss them but I'm turned off now and I don't think I can get my mojo back.
I expected to love this book. Maybe others will. Actually, I'm sure others will. I just can't keep going. There are just too many other books in my TBR pile waiting for their chance.
I'm not going to rate it since I didn't finish it. ...more
This one...um. Well... this takes spoilers to convey my "did not finish" shelf placement. Sorry.
(view spoiler)[ My first struggle was the implausibleThis one...um. Well... this takes spoilers to convey my "did not finish" shelf placement. Sorry.
(view spoiler)[ My first struggle was the implausible "benefactor" plot that Cash was for his family after they disowned him. If that was the only ridiculous plot point I probably could have overlooked it. Then the next problem was the step father and the ridiculous resolution to the abuse and subsequent murder that Cash was part of. I just could not buy into the idea that a policeman could allow his stepson to be abused by his friends on multiple occasions and then when the rapes are confirmed by the DA the whole thing never goes to trial for the rapists and the underage minor's mother is never told the actual truth and it's all sealed shut without an IA investigation or anything else. Not in a million years am I buying that. That was too far past reality that I could not suspend disbelief. I nearly gave up on it all at the third convenient and implausible plot point which was when Cash's little brother finds all the fights and rapes video taped. WTF...are you kidding me? After all these years you don't have to convince your family (who turned their back on you and wouldn't listen anyway) that you were the victim...they have all the evidence in a box...that they don't turn over to the authorities either...so the rapists are still running around. UGH, No, no, no. God and Day are COPS. No way. No.
Finally I gave up when the foursome started up like a kinky swing club right out of the precinct office. And the foursome wasn't even hot really. Don't get me started on the homophobic cop that comes out of closet, the police captain that lets his two detectives date and work as partners with full knowledge of the relationship and so many other silly, silly antics that I just had to give up at the very end. Could not have cared less what happened to Cash and Day by then. (hide spoiler)]
So, I quit reading. All the writing was too emotional and over the top for me anyway. Just not my style of harlequin romance...updated m/m style. ...more
Was this book edited? I'm really leaning toward no. I'm only 7% in and I'm ready to give up.
So far there have been numerous editing errors, such as eWas this book edited? I'm really leaning toward no. I'm only 7% in and I'm ready to give up.
So far there have been numerous editing errors, such as extra words, missing words and difficult sentence structures that made me re-read the sentences to understand what was being conveyed versus what was intended.
There are also mistakes like "he was full of vile" instead of "full of bile" and "He was a start raving lunatic" instead of "stark raving lunatic"
It's so distracting that I've lost the momentum of the story. ...more
I just can't seem to embrace these characters enough. I have fallen asleep two nights in a row trying to read this book...and I so rarely fall asleepI just can't seem to embrace these characters enough. I have fallen asleep two nights in a row trying to read this book...and I so rarely fall asleep reading even my kids asked me what was going on. ...more
This is the second AKM Miles book I have started and not finished. I know that is opposite of most of the other reviews and***ducks flying produce***
This is the second AKM Miles book I have started and not finished. I know that is opposite of most of the other reviews and I realize many may not agree with me. This is an overly nice, non-angsty, unrealistic, boy meets boy, happy ending story, but it just doesn't ring true at all and I gave up.
Dare is a counselor that knows and says all the right things. Every time, all the time. Ryan is a responsible business owner that says and does all the right things. The kid says and does all the right heart tugging things.
The second conversation Dare and Ryan have basically sets them up as life partners instead of first daters. It is all just toooo perfect and unbelievable. The conversation they have about their expectations is so...well...unrealistic.
I am not invested in any of their problems or concerns because the rainbows and flowers that follow in front of and behind them and the birds landing on their fingers and the rabbits sitting at their feet (metaphorically speaking) are just too distracting for me to get to really know the characters. The drama with the next door neighbor's ex-husband (or whoever he was, I don't remember already) is not too concerning because I know nothing too bad is really going to happen in the world of Dare and Ryan.