Plot - 3 stars - meanders and takes a long time for anything of substance to happen.
Writing - 2 stars - immature writing. Many errors. Didn't know unt...morePlot - 3 stars - meanders and takes a long time for anything of substance to happen.
Writing - 2 stars - immature writing. Many errors. Didn't know until near the end where this story was set. The author often jumps from one scene to another, with no warning other than the beginning of a new paragraph. Its quite jarring and takes a minute to figure out that time has elapsed.
Dialogue - 4 stars - not to bad
Characters - 4 stars - I liked them.
Upside - I was invested enough in the story and the characters to go on the second book.
I am a compulsive finisher, in that whatever movie, book, etc. I start...I finish, even when it begins to feel like a chore. So I think it says someth...moreI am a compulsive finisher, in that whatever movie, book, etc. I start...I finish, even when it begins to feel like a chore. So I think it says something, that I just couldn't finish this book. I have endured many books that contained characters that I didn't think were developed well, or that I didn't particularly like; and likewise, have endured many plot lines that I didn't enjoy - just because I am compelled to finish what I start. However, I finally abandoned this book at 41%.
For me, it was the poor use of grammar, and the immature writing. I found myself reading, and rereading sentences over and over trying to discern what the author wanted me to know. After a while, the tedium of trying to get through the bad writing, took me out of the story completely. Frankly, it just became a chore to read; not the escape I look for when reading.
On the good side, I don't mind a good - even unrealistic - escapist story, which this clearly is. There are still questions in my mind about where this story is going, and who this hero will turn out to be, but I don't have the energy to wade through the poor writing to find out.
I wish the author luck. She was able to do what I cannot, and that is conceive a plot and story, write, and finish a book! My suggestion would be to find a better editor, or beta reader, and then listen to their advice. Also, to carefully use her grammar check and take better care in mapping out her character development for consistency.
I would try this author again in the future, hoping that she will improve as she writes, but I will not continue this book or this series. (less)
The first book, "Torn from You", for me, was a 2 star read. I could almost not make it through the 6 chapters. It had many errors, and extremely unori...moreThe first book, "Torn from You", for me, was a 2 star read. I could almost not make it through the 6 chapters. It had many errors, and extremely unoriginal and predictable dialogue. Arggh! It was all I could do to make it to the end....but then there was this cliffy, and I couldn't resist a peek at where the story was going (And Damn! I hate when authors trick us into buying the next book, by leaving us something unresolved at the end of a book!)
So, I moved onto "Torn With You". Still, many mistakes, and a much longer, more drawn out story than it needed to be, but was more interested than I would have expected after the first novella. The story line is quite implausible, with a lead character that is an underground fighter / rockstar / participant in a sex-slave trade (without giving too many spoilers, I won't disclose how he is a participant).
On the positive side, I do like the characters, and can obviously see that the author plans on several parallel books based around the perimeter characters in this book. I will probably read them.
I do hope that her next books have better editing, proof-reading, beta-reading, whatever. Things like "Hummed and Hawed" instead of "Hemmed and Hawed" or "new" instead of "knew", etc. So aggravating!
So, in the end:
"Torn from You" - 2 stars overall "Torn with You" - 4 stars overall Editing - 3 stars Characters - 4 1/2 stars Story - 4 stars (would have been higher, except it dragged on too long) Dialogue - 3 stars Perimeter characters - 4 1/2 stars
Not as good as the first, but I will still probably give the other books in the series a try, based on how much I loved the first book in the series.
I...moreNot as good as the first, but I will still probably give the other books in the series a try, based on how much I loved the first book in the series.
I just couldn't connect with Sed and Jessica in the same way, I did with Brian and Myrna in the first book, which made reading all of the sex scenes, really, really dull. In my opinion, what makes a sex scene hot, is being able to identify with the characters, and getting swept up in their heat. In this case, we didn't really even get to know them as couple, and barely got to know Jessica at all, before we were knee deep in repetitive and over the top sex scenes.
I found myself wanting to read more about Brian and Myrna, and the rest of the Sinners, which we did get some of. In fact, the best part of this book for me, was all of the sideline stories about Trey, Brian, Myrna, and the rest of the guys. I'm a little sad that Sed, who was a fascinating character in the first book, didn't get the stellar story I wanted for him.
Still, I will continue the series, the characters are endearing and I need to know what happens for them all.(less)