Rose Boehm Rose's Comments (member since Oct 02, 2010)

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Sep 20, 2014 08:18AM

Sep 19, 2014 07:16AM

233 Congratulations, Dan. You do do these poems well.
Sep 17, 2014 07:27AM

Sep 15, 2014 09:36AM

233 Thank you, Doug.
Sep 14, 2014 03:04PM

233 Everyone is welcome to send in their GR finalist poems - I'll collect them until I have at least five each time to publish. So, the sooner you start sending, the sooner they'll be published.
Sep 14, 2014 08:09AM

Sep 14, 2014 05:50AM

233 Ha - been discovered! I was surprised nobody took me by my word.

Yes - the HOUSEBOAT is still open for business, but it isn't good with individual poems (the way it has evolved). I'd like to have at least around five or more per feature. Let's see whether there are others. I also thought it would be a nice publishing 'line' - and everyone in it can pass the link to the whole world.

GR finalist of month x !
Sep 12, 2014 11:22AM

233 On the way to where my brother lies dying

Steam rises from the asphalt path
between parked cars and unchecked hawthorn,
soft blossoms touching me in passing.
Fat drops of first summer rain.
I lift my face.

A local train comes to a slow halt
on the elevated platform behind me.
Young men and women descend
concrete stairs clutching
important briefcases.

When you got married I was eighteen
and came home for you. Mother cried
and Father blew his nose.
This was the first time you danced
with me, and I remembered
our Morse-code messages
in bomb shelters, your crystal radio,
the boots you'd outgrown
stuffed with newspapers
for my next winter.

My girl friends came to be seen
by you. I was popular
because of your beauty.

Your hair has thinned,
your skin lies dry on your bones.
Hold my hand.
Edelgard asked after you.
Sep 08, 2014 07:03AM

Sep 07, 2014 08:48AM

233 Indeed.
Sep 05, 2014 06:46AM

233 Gavin wrote: "...if poetry is form of truth.

Rose, you appear, with auto-correct, to have transmogrified into some cheap plonk!"

Sep 04, 2014 06:34PM

233 There used to be a section for those who don't want critique. Does it still work?
Sep 04, 2014 10:44AM

233 Yes!
Sep 04, 2014 10:42AM

233 Great!
Sep 04, 2014 10:40AM

233 I would also re-think this line:

'Surrounded by dirt it was dealt'
Sep 04, 2014 10:39AM

233 Richard wrote: "I think it needs a little tinkering.

To keep the verb tenses consistent, shouldn't it be:

As the chainsaw goes
Louder, I SIT listening and TRY
Not to watch

"Guess that ‘ol tree was out of luck."..."

Richard, I was about to post something just like this.
Sep 04, 2014 10:35AM

233 Terrific, Joan. I also have the 'Selected Poems', Daniel, and others. They are all equally ipressive! Shall get the latest soon.
Sep 03, 2014 08:59AM

Sep 01, 2014 07:44AM

233 The biggest thanks have to go to Jenna for her terrific poetry. But thank you all for reading and appreciating.
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